İn some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Young people are always interested in working and travelling.In some nations young people prfer to work or travel for a year prior to starting university study. Working and travelling has positive sides such as taking responsibility and relaxing. There are also some disadvantages as exhausting and distracting from study.
To begin with,some breaks before starting university study can be helpful for students. During travelling students visit places of their dream and fascinating sopts which lead to their phsycology in a positive way.In this case, students will relax and forget hardships which exist their life. Moreover,working in this period will assist them to be more responsible and they will be more experienced.For instance,a student who works in a shop interact with many people and get experience. These abilities will contriute them to be more confident and sociablein their university study.
On the other hand,working and travelling between finishing high school and starting university studies can tire them.Furthermore, it can lead to distracting from university study since sufficent salary can be enough for them.For example, statistics demonstrate that students who travel or work after finishing high school subjects become more difficult for them.
In conclusion,advantages of working or travelling prior to starting university studies are taking responsibility and relaxing. In my opinion,students should study their university studies without taking any breaks.
- İt is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport or music and others are not.However,it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. 71
- hould Wealthy Nations Be Required to Share Their Wealth Among Poorer Nations by Providing Such Things as Food and Education? or Is It the Responsibility of the Governments of Poorer Countries to Look After Their Citizens Themselves? 65
- Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? 58
- People in all modern societies use drugs but today s youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs and at an increasingly early age Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example Discuss the causes an 76
- İncreasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective? 70
Sentence: During travelling students visit places of their dream and fascinating sopts which lead to their phsycology in a positive way.In this case, students will relax and forget hardships which exist their life.
Description: The fragment which exist their is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace exist with verb, past tense
Sentence: Young people are always interested in working and travelling.In some nations young people prfer to work or travel for a year prior to starting university study.
Error: prfer Suggestion: prefer
Sentence: During travelling students visit places of their dream and fascinating sopts which lead to their phsycology in a positive way.In this case, students will relax and forget hardships which exist their life.
Error: sopts Suggestion: ?
Error: phsycology Suggestion: psychology
Sentence: These abilities will contriute them to be more confident and sociablein their university study.
Error: sociablein Suggestion: sociable
Error: contriute Suggestion: contribute
Sentence: On the other hand,working and travelling between finishing high school and starting university studies can tire them.Furthermore, it can lead to distracting from university study since sufficent salary can be enough for them.For example, statistics demonstrate that students who travel or work after finishing high school subjects become more difficult for them.
Error: sufficent Suggestion: sufficient
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Words: 230 350
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 230 350
No. of Characters: 1242 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.894 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.4 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.809 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.506 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.645 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5