Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?
Do you have sons/daughters or brother/sisters who are in childhood time? Do you decide what is better for their future? Think about it and it is probable that you thought first was their education. At presents, most parents are concerned about children’s education at earlier ages. This is because of education is considered to bring more benefits for the development of their children. Personally I agree with those parents and think it is much more benefitial for children to start their education at early ages for the reasons I will explain following.
First and foremost, younger children do...
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Sentence: Personally I agree with those parents and think it is much more benefitial for children to start their education at early ages for the reasons I will explain following.
Error: benefitial Suggestion: beneficial
Sentence: This additional assistance would complete the previuos formation given by their parents.
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Sentence: Nevertheless, just playing only help them to stay healthy but does not brign important knowledge to be used in the future.
Error: brign Suggestion: bring
Sentence: In school, they will be taught and in addition, they will play with their friends to develop their social habilities.
Error: habilities Suggestion: habitability
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