Can you please look into my general writing essay?
Some people believe that academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will derive more benefit from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics and cooking.
In some people's opinion, schools should include academic subjects in their curriculum, on the opposite side people believes that teaching practical subjects are more beneficial to the pupils. In my opinion, though academic subjects give less practical knowledge in intial school years but they can help students to get the professional career in the future.
Academic subjects such as physics and chemistry, prepare the base for students to pursue professional or skilled job in future. This skilled jobs are not only high paying jobs but they also helps to develop the country as developed nation. For example, teaching physics or biology to the students can help building in interest for the subjects since their childhood, which can potentially help them to get the professional degree in engineering and medical fields. As per the recent analysis across the world, discovered that, those countries grow fast which has more scientist, engineers and doctors, such as china and india compare to one who has less.
On other side, teaching real world practical skills like cooking, motor mechanics can give more job opportunities. This skills are job ready skills, which mean, students can quickly get jobs if they have learned this subjects. For example, A recent survey by well known recruiting firms indicates that there are more demand of auto mechanics, cooks, machine operator than the supply. There was also a report by the government that indicates, unemployment in this areas are lowest.
In conclusion, It is true that teaching practical subject can help students to get job faster but teaching academic subjects can help them building long running career. So in my view, It is more beneficial to teach academic subjects than practical subjects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...motor mechanics and cooking. In some peoples opinion, schools should include academi...
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Line 7, column 118, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...s to pursue professional or skilled job in future. This skilled jobs are not only high pa...
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Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...not only high paying jobs but they also helps to develop the country as developed nat...
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Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to build' or 'build'.
Suggestion: to build; build
...ics or biology to the students can help building in interest for the subjects since thei...
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Line 9, column 116, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...hanics can give more job opportunities. This skills are job ready skills, which mean...
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Line 9, column 459, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ernment that indicates, unemployment in this areas are lowest. In conclusion, It ...
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Line 11, column 140, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to build' or 'build'.
Suggestion: to build; build
...eaching academic subjects can help them building long running career. So in my view, It ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33435582822 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57804704107 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539877300613 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6653373207 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.214285714 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381814963765 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144292064478 0.084324248473 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.234105397065 0.0667982634062 350% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251479935909 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.316535719279 0.056905535591 556% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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