Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

New generation, has experienced astounding changes, since the modern workl has been effected vastly by new technologies. There have been mixed reactions to youth's decision making process in the past and in current time, some disagree that todays, yougsters are more independent and decided on their own. However, I am in favor of increse in youngster's independency. Following lines further describe my vews toward this changes.
First and foresome reason for my assertion is that new generation find job sooner than that times. Recently, economic problems made people to start their job in a younger age, and this made teens have to work. When they find a job in a younger age they feel more independent and make their decisions by their own. A contrast between me and my father can make this more clear. I started my first job at the age of 17, because we needed money and I had to earn money, while my father started his job when he was 23 years old. Since he needed to receive money from his parents, he could not make his own decisions.
A second factor that should be taken into account is that yougsters leave their family sooner than that times. this can be affected by many factors such as the first reason mentioned above. When people leave their family the are not in close contact with them. Hence the parents can not make any decision for them. My experience can be a compelling example. I left my parent when I was 20 years ago and live alone since then, this is the main reason that they can not tell me what to do and what not to do.
Another reason that deserves some more words is availability of new sources of information. New generation have access to a huge amount of information, mainly because of their interests to Internet. The youngsters can find lots of information about the event that they need to decide about. This change, had a unavoidable impact on peoples encounterment with their problems. Likewise, this must be considered that eventhough the Internet made lots of data available and youn people have access to it, this might be a source of many bad informations that mislead them. Consequently, new information sources can help young people both in positive and negative way.
In conclusion, In this era parents have less control and impact on their childeren these because young people find their job sooner and actualy find their way of living. As a result, they leave their parents sooner, in contrast to last decades. Besides, access to new technology and information made it easier for youth to make their decision easier than ever.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Suggestion: This
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, hence, however, likewise, second, so, then, while, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.774049217 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54421141539 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494407158837 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0401639341 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.36 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.88 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272975807785 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804983616594 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762324486547 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161649919919 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503406768525 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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