Today's world is very complex because of many factors that are involved in our lives. Consider factors like tax regulations, pensions and savings in banks, and insurances. That's why it is essential for young people to learn the ability to plan and organize for their lives. This essay will demonstrate the importance of this ability with providing two reasons.
First, as it has mentioned above; since there are many aspects involved in our modern lives, it is advised that the young learn to deal with them as soon as possible. Take tax regulations for instance; it is a very complicated process that every proprietor or business owner should consider. Let me elaborate this with an experience of mine. I'm an architect, and I have 28 years old. I have been granted by professional licensure of designing buildings and inspecting construction sites. Since the law recognizes me as a professional worker; it obligated me to pay my taxes annually in order to keep my licensure and be able to work in my field of study. When I first come across the process of paying my taxes; the whole process was vague and baffling to me. I had to take a couple of seminars to get a good grip on the procedure, and it took me a while until I fully understand the process. That was an example of how some intricate procedures could puzzle people, even adults.
Second, some of these factors weren't present in the past. Lives of people in the past weren't that complicated. They had their homes and lands, and there weren't insurances. If someone had lost their properties over natural calamities or other factors, there wasn't a defined procedure to recover their losses. Their only way of solving their problem was to go to the authorities and report the situation. But nowadays we have insurances to cover our loses. For example, I own a car for a couple of years now. I would like to maintain it in good condition, but I must protect it for some situations like preventing it from being stolen or protecting it from natural causes like earthquakes. The insurance would cover most of the damage. Therefore, my mind is at ease because of this precaution. This process has hardships, like what situations you would like to include in your contract that is absolutely necessary. Otherwise, it would cost you a lot of money.
Today's world has become much more complex than the past. Lots of procedures involved in our lives. It is advised that the young learn the ability to manage their resources to overcome problems and have a successful life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7722095672 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69327871561 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535307517084 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7211773616 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8214285714 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6785714286 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157485433451 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393083572159 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506074197775 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109822044528 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569600165676 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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