The purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain.
Throughout the history, human being’s lives have changed enormously since they have a tendency to improve their lives. TV programs would be an essential factor having remarkable effects on people's lives. While some people believe that the main purposes of TV programs are to educate, others hold exactly an opposite point of view and are convinced that its purposes should be entertain. In no way could I agree with the latter point. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, people are able to increase their knowledge, and also expand their horizon by watching a TV program. There is no doubt that television can play a significant role in awareness of people on account of the fact that, nowadays, almost all of the people are able to watch TV programs at their home. Moreover, although there are some programs with the purpose of entertain, what I am certain is that these programs are supposed to learn viewer by funny aspect. In fact, executive manager of TV programs using everything in order to expand people's horizon. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better, there was a time that I caught a disease and had to stay in my bedroom. Then, my friend had suggested me that channel four show some documentaries, after that I could find a lot of thing about the history of my country. As a result, until this incident occurred could I realize the importance of TV program, for I do believe that had I not watched that documentary, I would not have increased my information about my country.
Furthermore, some people believe that TV should play some entertainment since people need to release their stresses and tensions after the stressful and boring day of school or job. On the other hand, some people believe that it is better for people that TV play some programs which teach useful things to people since some people could not afford to enroll in a workshop and private classes and it is a really cost-effective way of education. Hence I firmly agree with the latter point, for I do believe that the more TV show useful and informative programs, the more poor people are able to increase their knowledge. By way of illustration, based on a conducted researches in my country, a high percentage of prosperous people say that they could increase their knowledge when they watch TV Programs.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous informative and instructive aspects of TV programs. Not only are they able to increase people's knowledge, but also they can provide an opportunity for poor people to expand their horizon without spending money. For this reason, were I be a determiner in our country, I would have invested a great deal of money on TV programs in order to increase people’s knowledge in a wide variety of fields.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'entertained'?
Suggestion: entertained
...e convinced that its purposes should be entertain. In no way could I agree with the latte...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ount of the fact that, nowadays, almost all of the people are able to watch TV programs at...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of things'.
Suggestion: a lot of things
... documentaries, after that I could find a lot of thing about the history of my country. As a r...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...really cost-effective way of education. Hence I firmly agree with the latter point, f...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'research'?
Suggestion: research
...y of illustration, based on a conducted researches in my country, a high percentage of pro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hey watch TV Programs. To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormou...
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Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...ithout spending money. For this reason, were I be a determiner in our country, I wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, really, so, then, while, in fact, no doubt, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83469387755 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71750997695 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479591836735 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.0826463772 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.684210526 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7894736842 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0773983176769 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274629228349 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678963676759 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0523117189614 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496235590187 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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