My last birthday
Birthday is a funny occasion with everybody. It has many ways to celebrate our birthday. We can hold party, go out with friends or family. I had 19 birthdays beside my friends and my family. I often hold small, simple and warm parties. I remember them because they are best memories in my life. Until now, the birthday that make me fell unforgetable is my 19th birthday. It was held last May. It was a special birthday because it was the first birthday that I live far from my family. In that afternoon, I went out with my best classmates. We ate ice-cream, "xèo" cake, and some delecious food. We chatted togerther about many interesting things. We laughed a lot. Ofcourse, we took many photos to make memory. They are really good friends. I am so lucky when I meet them, study with them and become friend with them. Although they are all my new friends at university, they are so kind and friendly. I remembered that they gave me a beautiful T-shirt and a card. I love them. Besides, I was received many wonderful wishes from my parents and other friends. My dad texted a phone message to me. He said congratulation and hoped I am always heathy, beautiful and study well. Then my mom phoned to me. She said the same my dad and asked me how I hold my birthday. I thanked my parents and I wished they can come there with me. It was more meaningful. I felt so moved and happy at that moment. In the evening, I had a small party with my friends in my dorm. They sang birthday'song very loudly. We also ate food, drank Fansta and listened to music. That was all our favourite songs. My room was so excited and noisy. We chatted until midnight. We cleaned the room and the party finished. Although I felt a bit homesick, it didn't matter. I always have my family and my friends by my side. It's enough. That was really a meaningful birthday and I was so greatful.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
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| 2018-02-01 | Kim Namjoon | 88 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...en hold small, simple and warm parties. I remember them because they are best mem...
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Line 1, column 267, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'are the best'.
Suggestion: are the best
...m parties. I remember them because they are best memories in my life. Until now, the bir...
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Line 1, column 659, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ogerther about many interesting things. We laughed a lot. Ofcourse, we took many p...
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Line 1, column 1731, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...hed. Although I felt a bit homesick, it didnt matter. I always have my family and my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, may, really, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 24.0651302605 341% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39884393064 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58439041323 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517341040462 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 35.0 5.43587174349 644% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 16.0721442886 230% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 9.0 20.2975951904 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.9347967605 49.4020404114 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 41.1351351351 106.682146367 39% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 9.35135135135 20.7667163134 45% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.43243243243 7.06120827912 20% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 8.67935871743 288% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406163509462 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090087217915 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115196143767 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.406163509462 0.151304729494 268% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.0 13.0946893788 31% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.26 50.2224549098 158% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 11.3001002004 39% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.46 12.4159519038 52% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 9.78957915832 41% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 5.6 10.1190380762 55% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 4.0 10.7795591182 37% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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