It is a controversial subject that physical exercise should be required for school students or it is not necessary and focusing on academic studies is more important. There are many positive comments about student's sport training however few negative points are too. I agree with the statement which says physical exercise is vital for children in schools. I explain my opinion in following reasons :
first of all, the importance of knowledge is obvious for everyone while academic education can not be neglected by parents and families. But we all know the requirement for a healthy brain is a proper body which means we can not focus just on studying and forget our body. Also Countries invest on sports as a prevention activity which researches indicate high level academic countries have basically more training hours in schools than the others. For instance united states with the best universities in world ranking has the maximum physical practicing in schools.
Secondly, children became bored easily from continuous activities and we should care of them to avoid from this fact. In fact academic studies could be rejected by every one whether young or mature person if they would be forced to study without any stop. So body activities during the day in school in addition to its healthy effect has a break role for studying.
Finally, some researches show the educational systems which have non-academic studies in their programs like physical training result better parents with more responsibility, more team work abilities and self-control skills. There are some benefits in these practicing which we do not see in academic ones. For example, school student learns in this training how to act as a group or how be in order which we can find hardly in academic type.
In conclusion, we should see physical training as a crucial time for schools every day while there have direct and indirect affects to communities and individuals. Governments also should have cultural plans for parents to teach them how these sports are undeniable for their kids and try to nurture them with this view that they should care their body to be success in other fields.
- tpo 8.Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. 90
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.Do you agree or disagree?Which other types of job should be highly paid? (The answer is a sample not written by myself. The goal is to compare the 84
- 55) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...in my opinion in following reasons : first of all, the importance of knowledge is ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: OBVIOUS_FOR[1]
Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to everyone'.
Suggestion: obvious to everyone
... of all, the importance of knowledge is obvious for everyone while academic education can not be neg...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s just on studying and forget our body. Also Countries invest on sports as a prevent...
^^^^
Line 7, column 414, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'find'.
Suggestion: hardly find
...a group or how be in order which we can find hardly in academic type. In conclusion, we...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08379888268 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65723562022 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564245810056 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6418677932 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.45110844103 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298804864249 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10476910089 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689147747382 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174731660643 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609265036866 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.