At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Unlike the past, population have been increased and, I firmly believe, the population of people who live in a country play an essential role in a variety of fields, either developing countries or advanced ones. The question is, however, whether large number of young adult population in comparison to older people bring numerous blessings or not. Despite popular belief, I am, to a huge extent, an advocate of the former approach.
Granted, young population, from a practical viewpoint, are the rudimentary part of every society. First and foremost thing which come through my mind is related to their energy which directly connected to their physical preparation and reveals their health quality. Their physical preparation positively positively impact their efficiency. In contrast, elder people suffer from a number of ailment and government should allocate some part of the budget on their insurance and medical care facilities. As an illustration we can mention that in the most job proficiency they wish someone who is young and healthy. Further and the most importantly, young adults surprisingly are familiar with various high-tech devices and methods rather than elderly. Hence, they can be a potent source in order stimulate a country to become prospers.
On the other hand, nevertheless, aging people acquire a myriad of experiences during the span of their longevity. Thus inexpert people conveniently can benefit from their advises. For instance, experienced people, ‘aging ones’, can be a great manager in an arduous situation, since they can lead us in a right way by providing valuable strategies and remedies in order to put an end on obstacles and difficulties in a fast rate.
All things considered, although elderly result in some merits by their experiences, I wholeheartedly reaffirm that the benefits of young adult population outnumber and outweigh elderly advantages, particularly in terms of energy consumption and familiarity with improvements.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: positively
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Suggestion: Thus,
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...duous situation, since they can lead us in a right way by providing valuable strategies and re...
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Suggestion:
...tion and familiarity with improvements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47231270358 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03500918554 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635179153094 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.535269585 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138605518711 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043022875629 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451915101534 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085688990863 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476317173318 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.13 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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