Some people think parents should teach children how to be a good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to team this.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Submitted by gehan on Tue, 07/16/2013 - 14:28

Over the past decades, the education has seen a massive diversity. There are health education, sex education, drugs, private education, specific education and more. This variety can meet the needs of all students to build their future. However, some people don't convince with classical education and prefer home-schooling because they think that it provides them the code of social ethics which are not provided through the formal education. In this essay I will try to examine the important role of school and home as well.

There are much advantages of mandatory education. Students, of course learn academic skills such as Science, Mathematics and Languages which help them to build their future career. Moreover, Some schools are introduce social and communication programmes to learn pupils how to deal with their community. And they can practice these social activities with their peers. Thus, the school is considered a great environment to practice social and academic skills as well.

Home is the first school for everyone. Parents play a vital role on raising children . They teach their offspring the ethics and believe system . These things could affect the personality of the new generation and give them their identities . Another role parents can play, is supervising the school performance of their kids and contacting with the teachers to discuss about the students’ levels. Thus, parents make a great contribution to build the personality and the future of their children.

As was shown in this essay, both , the school and the home can make a common contribution to qualify students for their future and to be good civilians, can help their community.

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Hi , I am Gehan
i didn't believe it . Is it really my score?
i toke your advice about my early essay and i just amendment it a little.
you suggested me to read 1000 essay and write 100.but i distribute this mission by topic,then, i started by education topic.
And , this is my plan:
1) study all collocations about Education
2) read some good essays about education on the internet.
3)train for spelling.
4) study some opening and conclusion phrases.
5)Finally, when i read the question,i didn't think about ideas. i think about collocations instead and then, turn them out into ideas.

however, education is just the only topic i studied and i haven't finished yet .
i will go along and keep reading and writing here.
thank you so much for your great help.