You have lost an item of value on train.Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter•Describe the item•Explain where and when you left it•Say what action you would like the company to take

Submitted by rahul0910 on Sun, 02/11/2018 - 05:50

Dear Sir,

This is in regards to a misplaced laptop on a Shatabdi Express with PNR No. IN31701. The train started from New Delhi at 9.00AM and reached Amritsar at 1.00PM on 22nd January 2018. The booking on the train was in coach 2F, seat no. 47.

The laptop was of brand 'Apple', silver in colour and was quite valuable. It was housed in a black sleek rubber casing and was very light in weight.

It was unknowingly left at the adjustable table near the mentioned seat when I was de-boarding the train at Amritsar and forgot to pack in my bag-pack. Until, I realised the absence of laptop, the train had departed from the platform.

This is a kind request to follow up with the information provided and assist in getting the laptop back. In case of its retrieval, please reach me at +91 9999XXXXXX and I'll come up with the booking ticket and identity proof at the said location. Your assistance would be deeply appreciated.

Yours sincerely
Elon Musk

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 9, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Sir, This is in regards to a misplaced laptop on a Shatabdi Expres...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... train was in coach 2F, seat no. 47. The laptop was of brand Apple, silver in co...
^^^
Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: silver
.... 47. The laptop was of brand Apple, silver in colour and was quite valuable. It was housed i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: light
... black sleek rubber casing and was very light in weight. It was unknowingly left at the adj...
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Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
..., please reach me at +91 9999XXXXXX and Ill come up with the booking ticket and ide...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 32.9175257732 33% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 796.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65497076023 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45262906909 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 221.4 290.88556701 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5549512763 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3636363636 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.0 4.34317383033 0% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0493758273771 0.216113520407 23% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0227247101731 0.0766984524023 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244264134509 0.0603063233224 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0272401208308 0.12726935374 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200664710989 0.0580467560999 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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