Education is a necessity on one's person life. Education, also plays a huge role in our society. I do agree that universities and colleges, sports and social activities are very important as classes and libraries should receive equal financial support. The reasons will be explain at the later part of my essay.
In my view,the life of a student is more often stressful which includes projects that should submit it on time, exams that includes of several chapters to read, For my personal opinion, student should join some programs in the universities or colleges because this can help them engage to other student gaining more friends and at the same time to enhance their skills other than purely academics. An example is that, I remembered when I was in college I was obliged to joined the basketball games during the university fair, for this extracurricular activities I was able to increase and boost my self confidence, self discipline and I was able to gained new friends.
Another thing is that, Students can learned how to balance between academics and playing sports or social activities and going to the library. In that way, their mindset is well nourish with different ideas that can apply this ideas in their respective life.Being engaged to any school activities helps a student to release tension, anxiety and sometimes life of a student is very exhausted. In my own experienced, I was in college with a degree in health science my dean require us to submit a journal about altered mental status and we have to submit it in 3 days, the feeling of overwhelmed and thinking how we can finish it 3 days with my group. My group mates thought of an idea to attend a activities in outside school that gives a presentation on our topic altered mental status. So, with this act of socialization we came up finishing the journal and we were able to submit it on time.
I hereby conclude that Student should learn the meaning of balance their time between academics and engaging to sports, social activities. Many factors to considered self discipline, building up self confidence, gaining a new friends In that way, students will not feel so stress and feeling anxious about their paper works, exams and submission of project. That's why, I agree university/college are as important as classes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, well, another thing, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89540816327 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7819728463 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.2618676398 48.9658058833 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.071428571 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163875492066 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743281435102 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134127816696 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128279612813 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110769774867 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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