Over the past century, reading, writing, and maths skills are always the most important parts of education. Some people argue that every child will benefit if a fourth skill is added: the computer skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that school education always puts great value on imparting students with appropriate reading, writing and maths skills. Some people believe computer skills should be added as the fourth skill. I firmly agree with the opinion.
There is no doubt that children can derive substantial benefits if they are equipped with suitable computer skills. It is well-known that computer provides students with an easy access to the Internet, which is regarded as a more convenient and vivid way to acquire knowledge compared with reading books. As the contents presented on the Internet are usually appealing and easy to follow, children who are equipped with necessary computer skills will be rendered with a comprehensive understanding of abstracted and complicated principles, thereby improving their study productivity. One piece of research conducted in the USA reveals that students who have learnt some computer skills usually have a better study performance than those who have not.
At the same time, imparting youngsters with effective computer skills facilities their future development. This is because nowadays, computers have been used as an essential office equipment in majority companies. If people can handle an outstanding computer skill in their professional area, for example, a marketing specialist knows how to use publisher to design pamphlets, this person is highly likely to obtain a promotion opportunity. Likewise, as an important information carrier, computer possesses the capability of exchanging information and dispersing news. Hence, teaching children to use computer equals to providing them with the connection to the world, which also benefits their future development.
In conclusion, the ability of using computer provides paramount advantages to children. Therefore, I am in support of the idea that it should be added as an additional skill in children’s skill set.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. may not use those pattern sentences like:
It is true that..
There is no doubt that...
a lot of other uses are using the same thing.
2. never use one verb/phrase over one time in one essay, like:
if they are equipped with suitable computer skills
children who are equipped with necessary computer skills
computer provides students with an easy access
the ability of using computer provides paramount advantages to children
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1583 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.459 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.888 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.122 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 170, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
...wn that computer provides students with an easy access to the Internet, which is regarded as a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, likewise, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60344827586 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00162659035 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596551724138 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9756140617 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.071428571 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194807981972 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762273366875 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590711673663 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138681394559 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657490222239 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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