The given issue states that companies quite often hire consultants from outside to improve the efficacy of the company;however if the companies spent more time listening to their own employees , such consultants would be unnecessary. In my view, the statement is spot on- though at times we need a fresh set of eyes to gather perspective, not always does that lead to an improvement in efficiency; it is always better to first look into our own backyard, instead of approaching a third party. This thought will be further elucidated in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, consider our health. Now that fitness has become a fad, and that everybody is suddenly being health conscious, the number of health coaches and fitness experts have increased. Though these experts guide us efficiently through our fitness regime, based on immense data points to back their advice with; it is not until we ourselves start working out, and follow a strict diet and routine, will we be efficiently following their suggestions, to see our efforts to fruition. Until and unless we realise that there is something wrong with our diet or routine or workout, we would pay heed to their solicited advice.Thus, this example, drives home the point that instead of investing in a third party consultant, we should first deliberate and understand what exactly is the problem, and then decide if we need outside help or we can solve the puzzle on our own.
Similarly, in companies, be it a start-up or an mnc, it is first necessary to do the root cause analysis. and find out where the bottlenecks are. If we have not done the analysis ourselves, we wouldn't know which consultant we should hire, and we may end up hiring a wrong person or wasting money; if we could solve the problem ourselves. This is very common in start-ups, where the founders feel they are inefficient managers, and as the organisation starts growing, they decide to hire CEOs, without deliberating much on their grievances, and end up getting culled from the very company that they started.This wouldn't have happened if they would have first discussed with their fellow colleagues, what was needed to scale the organisation, or is there a consensus on the decision to hire a new manager.
Likewise, consider the case of a busy household today, families are nuclear, both parents are working, and kids are neglected. There is not much bonding in the family, so parents seek advise of professional counsellors who suggest family outings, and trips, but even on such excursions , parents may continue to work remotely and the kids are left to wander on their own. In this scenario the point missed is lack of communication and conversation between the family members, had the parents made an effort to realise that, they wouldn't have to spend money on go for family trips, and just by talking to each other, they would have bonded together as a happy family.
Thus according to the aforementioned paradigms, I agree with the issue which states that consultants would be unnecessary if companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...re time listening to their own employees , such consultants would be unnecessary. ...
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Line 3, column 632, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...ould pay heed to their solicited advice.Thus, this example, drives home the point th...
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Line 5, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...arly, in companies, be it a start-up or an mnc, it is first necessary to do the ro...
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Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ecessary to do the root cause analysis. and find out where the bottlenecks are. If ...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...ave not done the analysis ourselves, we wouldnt know which consultant we should hire, a...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...from the very company that they started.This wouldnt have happened if they would hav...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...the very company that they started.This wouldnt have happened if they would have first ...
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Line 5, column 680, Rule ID: FELLOW_CLASSMATE[1]
Message: Use simply 'colleagues'.
Suggestion: colleagues
...y would have first discussed with their fellow colleagues, what was needed to scale the organisat...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
..., and trips, but even on such excursions , parents may continue to work remotely a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ts made an effort to realise that, they wouldnt have to spend money on go for family tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, likewise, look, may, similarly, so, then, third, thus, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2595.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96175908222 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78771779805 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541108986616 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.77640449438 676% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.409361256 60.3974514979 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.0 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8666666667 23.4991977007 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254744097864 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888880794275 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148323929879 0.0758088955206 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186147834133 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148977050222 0.0667264976115 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.1392134831 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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