What can help you to succeed?
The success stories of numerous world-renowned celebrities justify the idea that one's bright future is held in the palm of his own hand. Being discovered and acknowledged by influential people, or potential employers, is only a fortunate encounter, or a good opportunity. Taking advantage of their help might make it easier to obtain a satisfactory post. Nonetheless, whether one can finally succeed or not depends largely on his consistent efforts. Previous accomplishments have already become history. Therefore, one's strengths should be further developed and new accomplishments achieved, otherw...
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- Are environmental issues too complex to be handled by the individual? 90
- Is advertising the main cause of unhealthy eating habits 85
- Should young people try different jobs before they decide on their long-term job or career? 90
- The only way the government can conserve energy 85
- What can help you to succeed 81
Comments
When the essay topic is short
When the essay topic is short, the e-grader may send a wrong evaluation report. It actually deserves 25 in 30.
The flaw of the essay is that the introduction is too long. while it is better to have a shorter introduction but with one more argument paragraph.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 516, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...have already become history. Therefore, ones strengths should be further developed a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 974, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...is past used to be, his future will not be promising. Therefore, seize the opportunity and c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...im to be the only determining factor in a persons promising future. What should be taken ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, after all, in addition, in summary, as a matter of fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43973214286 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19549239957 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595982142857 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.558553703 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2592592593 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5925925926 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0626701167305 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0155326707971 0.076458572812 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369516072732 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.038019988955 0.150856017488 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231973694083 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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