Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television
has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use
specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Television is one of the most important inventions by the human being, it’s facilitates our life many way. Television is good teacher, because it’s a powerful source of information that provides the people with knowledge of the surrounding. There is a big issue if the television enhances the communication between the people or not. Some people believe that television damages the social relationships between the people, but I think TV is a good way to strengthen the communication between the people.
First of all, television displays vast variety of programs that suit all the tastes. These TV shows attracts many people of different ages. TV improves the communication between parents and their children, it lets them to gather on one room to watch an interesting movie and have fun after a long day of work and study. At the end of the movie the family members start their discussion about the events that occur in the movie and share their opinion between each other. So it’s a good way to enhance the relation between children and their parents.
Second, television is good source of information, and is an effective way to recognize on different cultures which assists us to build up a new friendship with people from different countries. For examples, the person can join a group in facebook or another social media and discuss with them many subject about their cultures and habits, since the TV provides them enough information to build a background about new culture. So they enjoy talking to each other and sharing the conversation about their interests.
Finally, television leads to active the discussion and argumentation between the viewers of same program. To enhance the communication between people, they must have same interested program but with different point of view. So everyone is impatient to inform the other about his opinion of the some events occur in the show, and the other try to convince someone else about his ideas. For example, when a group of guy gathers to watch a match of football and they encourage different team, so it’s an interested way to enhance their friendship.
To sum up, some people agree that television is a curse that damages their social life but I see that television is a grace because it’s provide us with different benefits, and the most important one is improving and enhancing our social communication not just with people of same country but with a people of different countries and cultures.
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Sentence: To sum up, some people agree that television is a curse that damages their social life but I see that television is a grace because it's provide us with different benefits, and the most important one is improving and enhancing our social communication not just with people of same country but with a people of different countries and cultures.
Description: The fragment it's provide us is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace provide with verb, past tense
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