In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.
Throughout the history of humankind, people have tried to find methods to live perpetually. In the traditional stories remained in the many years show that they made a lot of attempts to reach the miracle material to live without any fatality, but no one could find that. Nevertheless, with burgeoning technology, people can enhance their level of health to live with more longevity. This notion was inspired by living perpetually and without dying. In this essay, I explain my idea about the age of people is more than past people and clarify my reasons hereunder.
First and foremost, many people of a city were dying from such diseases as cold, and plague. Because they had not enough method and medicine for curing them. On the contrary, in the contemporary life, people not only have suitable drugs, but also have sophisticated doctors and high-tech hospital to treat each disease, and even they are cured without pain and wound, which were significant factors caused to past people to die. Therefore, nowadays, people are surviving after each complicated illness, so living longer time than past people were deprived the best facilities to be healthy.
Secondly, in past time, people who get new territories and forage foods in every region must confront each other to access these resources, and many of them died in the wars and attacks between two or more nations. On the other hand, people living in the 21st are adopting many peaceful rules to spread the justice around the world. With this regard, all people are living with themselves without any war, since many roles are justified to distribute evenly any resource and territory. These rules help people to behave very kindly to prevent them from violence and crime. As historic standpoint shows that when many rules were designed, people could live more than before not being any rules because all wars were finished so peacefully that many people were saved from dying.
All in all, people instinctively like long-lasting life, but past people could not detect a suitable way to satisfy their demands, however, contemporary people are using technology and wise rules to expand their lives toward a perpetuate life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...facilities to be healthy. Secondly, in past time, people who get new territories and for...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...wise rules to expand their lives toward a perpetuate life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05817174515 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50237109495 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573407202216 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2091413923 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.733333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234999584056 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885295870081 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437580107477 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151256697855 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292000643858 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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