It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts .
Over the last few decades , improving education has been the topic of some controversies . Some profession said that we should teach students ideas and concepts . In the opposite side , some students said they should only learn and remember facts instead of learning concepts . From my perspective , I am better convinced by the former for following reasons.
Firstly , what I put in my priority is the effect of learning ideas and concepts .Learning and understanding ideas and concepts clearly will make it easier for you to learn facts . In addition, instead of remembering a lot of facts , we can learn ideas and concepts which we can infer facts from . Take physic as an example , when you learn about magnetic field , if you understand ideas and concepts of electric , you can infer facts in easy way. Moreover, you can safe more time learning because the amount of information from facts is more than from ideas and concepts . By the large , understanding ideas and concepts will help you easier to learn facts and safe more time.
Secondly, through a long period of developing , since seventeenth century , the world has been changing with rapid speed . Thousand of equipments were invented and most of them were invented base on ideas and concepts such as steam engine , electricity , light bulb , etc . Therefore, understanding ideas and concepts will bring innovation to our life . Besides, learning only facts will make some people have wrong notion, for example when someone sick , they believed that there is a ghost in their body and a few people have died because of wrong thought . By the large , understanding ideas and concepts will bring innovation to our life and to the world .
In conclusion , the effect of learning ideas , concepts and innovations of the world are my reasons for my opinion . It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writing before choosing the way you learn .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05714285714 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70468505751 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5210654929 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5625 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.5376344086 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45651571335 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155562852519 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101345508837 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255836249281 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919143844426 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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