Fever artist ever manage to achieve Fame, let alone a livable ways often after struggle to make ends meet for most of their lives. for this reason, some people believe that it is irresponsible for a parent to encourage their child to pursue artistic caree

It is true that career of artist is quite humpy and cannot provide recognition to everyone;the cost of living and affording a family cannot be predictable. Therefore the part of society thinks that children must not be encouraged in pursuing such career. I hold a firm belief that such desires of a child must not be suppressed and he must be allowed to take interest in such activities.

The first and foremost reason to get into in artistic field is that it opens the doors of creativity in the children which help them to find thier true self and broadens their skill in work place or studies. There is competition in every field and such is the case with the artists and if once they get public recognition they can earn higher then any normal office job.

There may be less interest of public in arts and sculptures in contemporary world but there have been many dignified personalities in such careers. One such case is of the movie director Sanjay Leela Bhansali ;he is the utmost director on Bollywood nowadays and has got respect of famous actors . He is successful due to his creativity and artistic thinking.

In conclusion i would say that children must be allowed to take part in artistic work but not on the expense of education.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1032.0 1615.20841683 64% => OK
No of words: 220.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69090909091 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62799726949 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577272727273 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8971419814 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4444444444 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0797213732064 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356186087729 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260189195926 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0479484179521 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199508719956 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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