BIOGRAPHY OF MY BROTHER
My brother is the most influential person in my life. His name is Bach, and he is 23 years old, therefore there is a 7-year age difference between us. Despite our age gap, we get along really well and can accomplish things together. Furthermore, we have similar interests and lives. Throughout my life, I have strived to be more like him; he is not just my elder brother, but also my peer and role model. My brother and I get along well, which makes me happy.
Furthermore, he has made a huge difference in my life. I had a lot of academic troubles a few years ago, and my brother helped me figure out who I was. My academic performance has remained consistently strong since then. When I had a good score, though, I had some psychological issues. My brother Bach understood my worry and assisted me much. He lets me do whatever I want, I can discuss anything with him, and we hang out together. Additionally, he always understands how to make me feel better about a horrible circumstance.
My brother is a great learner who knows a lot about things around us. I feel that I need to take it as motivation for myself to keep growing and doing new things. He never competed with me, which I believe any brother-in-law would do. But, happily, my brother has always been there for me, and my success is due in part to him. Moreover, he taught me to be optimistic and to believe in my own abilities and efforts. He has a totally distinct way of thinking and seeing things, so I know that when he gives me advice, it is most likely excellent counsel and advice that he knows is best for me.
In brief, many life lessons that my brother taught to me have benefited me even now. I value him because he helped me choose the right path and protected me from negative influences. I wouldn't be who I am now without him.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, well, i feel, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37982195846 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64814476779 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569732937685 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9018358535 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.0909090909 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3181818182 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04545454545 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30825760575 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122753523341 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135923729614 0.0737576698707 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217377952734 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790918955298 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.53 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6.0
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