The statement implies that the deer populations reported from local hunters are declining and the trend is matched with recent global warming. Therefore, it concludes that the declining deer populations is resulted from the impact of global warming, which makes them unable to follow their usual migration patterns to cross the frozen sea and search for the food they need. However, before this statement can be properly evaluated, three evidence must be provided.
First of all, to make the reports from hunters valid and warranted enough to prove the declining trend of deer populations, this statement should provide specific details of the reports, including the number of sampling data, the observation period, and the way hunters observing deer populations as evidence. For instance, if the reports only consist of the observation from three local hunters within two months, and they only go out for hunting once a week, then the reports will be severely biased because of lacking of enough data and not taking the seasonality factor into consideration. Consequently, the statement would need to provide more information of the reports to make the reports effective.
Furthermore, the statement should deliver evidence of the necessity of deer migration to find their food. According to the passage, their habitat, the islands they live on, must be warm enough to sustain the plants they feed on, which means they must live within the area with the certain plants they need. If those plants are sufficient enough for deer, then there is no need for them to cross the sea to search for foods. Therefore, global warming should not impact populations of deer from the aspect of food searching, since their existing habitats already contain the plants they need so even if global warming does lead to sea ice melting in Canada’s arctic regions, which hinders them from migrating across islands, they can still survive with enough foods.
Finally, the statement should present evidence about the causal effect of global warming and the declination of deer habitats and populations, including by what degree does the sea ice melt caused by global warming and when has this impact been identified, so that it can be further analyzed if global warming should be account for the decline of deer populations. For instance, if the global warming effect was identified fifty years ago, and the speed of sea ice melting has been progressing in an extremely slow speed that so far only an exceptionally small percentage of sea ice melts; however, the reports from local hunters stating a drastically declining trend starting from last year. In such case, the change of deer populations can be hardly related to global warming, since there is no sign showing that deer populations were affected when global warming has started decades ago.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can offer details of above evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the relationship between declining deer populations and deer not being able to cross the sea.
- TOEFL T P O 28 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 28 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-29:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 73
- Investments in life saving technology are more valuable than investments in technology related to entertainment or luxury 73
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 512 350
No. of Characters: 2575 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.757 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.029 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.536 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.205 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The statement implies that the deer popu...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed, three evidence must be provided. First of all, to make the reports from h...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...orts to make the reports effective. Furthermore, the statement should delive...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...can still survive with enough foods. Finally, the statement should present ev...
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Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'accounted'?
Suggestion: accounted
...er analyzed if global warming should be account for the decline of deer populations. Fo...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...al warming has started decades ago. In conclusion, the argument, as it stand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2647.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 512.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.169921875 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6424842925 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4609375 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.497111066 57.8364921388 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.466666667 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1333333333 23.324526521 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29189680986 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984310218801 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102789940631 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157444855863 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154869652471 0.0628817314937 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 14.3799401198 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.3550499002 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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