A memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company states that the company should augment more budget for publicity of the quality of the movie through advertisement by next year. It fails to maintain several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To satiate the salutatory conclusion, the directors' reason is that the quality of a movie can be said well with the basis of the increasingly good reviews, the problem definitely belongs to the publicity of quality of movies. So, the argument is considered as incomplete or unsubstantive.
First, the argument readily assumes that during the past year the number of people attending Super screen produced movies are decreasing since few years. It is merely and the assumption is made without solid ground. There can be a possibility that the actual number of people attending movies are actually not decreasing. It is also possible that meantime other movies company are making a better movie than the Super Screen and the many people attracted over there. The argument would have been better if the arguer provides the date of the viewer of the Super Screen's movie since last few years and the total movie viewers of that period.
Second, the argument claims that the quality of movies is well maintained by giving the supporting clue of increasing good reviews. This again is a weak analogy presented by an arguer. It does not demonstrate a clear correlation between increasing good reviews and quality of the movies. It fails to explain, what is the number of reviews and by what percent it is increased compared to past years. It also fails to explain the reviewers are a serious movie over or not.
Moreover, the idea of an increasing fund to advertise the quality of movies to the targeted people is not corroborated well by an arguer. It raises some Skeptical questions. For example, What numbers of viewers are expecting by a company? How much cost will need to reach with targeted people? Is that cost will be paid back in near future? What is the trend of the collection of overall movies business? Is it overall increasing and only decreasing in case of Super Screen? Is there any interest group playing in between? Without convincing to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the argument is more than a wishful thinking rather than a substantive evidence.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, th
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2009 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.795 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.606 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.76 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.981 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.26 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.459 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...it is increased compared to past years. It also fails to explain the reviewers are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91408114558 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6755975575 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482100238663 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.4867837186 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.36 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.64 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324681045046 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773645658031 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0923735022029 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156656622073 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124872868585 0.0628817314937 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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