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Write a response in which you deliberate on the kind of questions that need answers before deciding whether the suggestion and the supporting argument are practical. Be certain to clarify how the answers to these questions would aid in assessing the the quality of recommendation.
Two years ago, Restora Health Care center in Masonville decided to start a health awareness program for its residents. Since that time, Restora’s share of patients in the Masonville area has significantly increased. Moreover, a survey conducted across the nation indicates that many people are inclined towards these kind of awareness programs. Citing these facts, the director of Claris Care Health center in Amway has suggested that Claris should also initiate such health awareness programs of its own to entice more patients from its community.
The survey state that, because of awareness program for its resident in Masonville, number of patient increaces in Restora Health Care center and now citing this facts, director of Claris care Health center should start the same program to entice the patient. In the first view statment does not seen any flawed but after the detailed look there is some flawed in the given argument statement and i will show in below three questions.
Firstly, do the patient is area is increases because of health awareness conducted by Restora Health Care center in Masonville? if the time of survey maybe there is dieases is spread in that particular area because of this maybe number of patients increases. if above sentence is true then the given original argument is weakened.
Secondly, does awareness program really help for Health center in overall nation? the original argument said that, in survey after the number of patient is increases. but they did not mention about anything about how many patient is increases after the awareness program also with not mention the two year numerical data to show the percent increases. if the author of survey not having any above information then the original argument does not hold water.
Finally, does the Claris care Health center also get sucess to entice patient in Amway like Restora Health care center? if the Masonville having endemonium ( local dieases) in Mosonville and because this they observed the number of patient but if Amway, does not have any dieases is spread in Amway then maybe the Claris care Health center will be fail to entice the more patient like Restora.if above sentence is true then the survey is weakened.
In conclusion, the given argument sentence have many unstated flaws are seen if they show the their entire study and research and evaluate their statement then maybe we should consider survey as a practical.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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The survey state that, because of awaren...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...stora Health Care center and now citing this facts, director of Claris care Health c...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...wed in the given argument statement and i will show in below three questions. ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... will show in below three questions. Firstly, do the patient is area is incre...
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Suggestion: If
...stora Health Care center in Masonville? if the time of survey maybe there is dieas...
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Suggestion: If
...his maybe number of patients increases. if above sentence is true then the given o...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...his maybe number of patients increases. if above sentence is true then the given o...
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...given original argument is weakened. Secondly, does awareness program really ...
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Suggestion: The
...lp for Health center in overall nation? the original argument said that, in survey ...
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Suggestion: But
...ter the number of patient is increases. but they did not mention about anything abo...
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Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun patient seems to be countable; consider using: 'many patients'.
Suggestion: many patients
...id not mention about anything about how many patient is increases after the awareness progra...
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Suggestion: If
...cal data to show the percent increases. if the author of survey not having any abo...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cal data to show the percent increases. if the author of survey not having any abo...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iginal argument does not hold water. Finally, does the Claris care Health cen...
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Line 7, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: If
... Amway like Restora Health care center? if the Masonville having endemonium local...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ter? if the Masonville having endemonium local dieases in Mosonville and because ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...is true then the survey is weakened. In conclusion, the given argument senten...
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Line 9, column 100, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...ny unstated flaws are seen if they show the their entire study and research and evaluate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02547770701 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34981783976 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429936305732 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.4417650845 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0244667055451 0.218282227539 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0133582340256 0.0743258471296 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0125494363747 0.0701772020484 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0168415964242 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00815965620588 0.0628817314937 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The survey state that, because of awaren...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...stora Health Care center and now citing this facts, director of Claris care Health c...
^^^^
Line 1, column 412, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...wed in the given argument statement and i will show in below three questions. ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... will show in below three questions. Firstly, do the patient is area is incre...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...stora Health Care center in Masonville? if the time of survey maybe there is dieas...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...his maybe number of patients increases. if above sentence is true then the given o...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...his maybe number of patients increases. if above sentence is true then the given o...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...given original argument is weakened. Secondly, does awareness program really ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...lp for Health center in overall nation? the original argument said that, in survey ...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ter the number of patient is increases. but they did not mention about anything abo...
^^^
Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun patient seems to be countable; consider using: 'many patients'.
Suggestion: many patients
...id not mention about anything about how many patient is increases after the awareness progra...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...cal data to show the percent increases. if the author of survey not having any abo...
^^
Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cal data to show the percent increases. if the author of survey not having any abo...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iginal argument does not hold water. Finally, does the Claris care Health cen...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... Amway like Restora Health care center? if the Masonville having endemonium local...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ter? if the Masonville having endemonium local dieases in Mosonville and because ...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is true then the survey is weakened. In conclusion, the given argument senten...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 100, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...ny unstated flaws are seen if they show the their entire study and research and evaluate ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02547770701 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34981783976 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429936305732 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.4417650845 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0244667055451 0.218282227539 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0133582340256 0.0743258471296 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0125494363747 0.0701772020484 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0168415964242 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00815965620588 0.0628817314937 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.