The argument presented here does not perform an apple to apple comparison between Balmer Island and Seaville and it seems to be built upon data which is inadequate to explain the cause for reduction of accidents in Seaville nor sufficient to explain how this can be applicable or useful to Balmer Island.
It is highly noble of the council to take such precautionary measures, but neither the decision of the council nor their explanation seems to address one of the possible cases such as, drunken driving. A major part of the accidents that take place can be attributed to the negligence of an inebriated driver or a pedestrian. As per the argument the population increases to the number specified which means that at a many points in time the city has a hundred thousand using it's streets and there could be a large number of them using private vehicles. Meaning, one dizzy driver using a car can harm many at a given time. Without addressing the issue of drunken driving, any measures to reduce the flow of vehicles on the road would be grossly inadequate.
The argument mentions that reducing the number of mopeds that could be rented per day would reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The question arises, can the moped drivers be completely attributed to these accidents or is it due to lack of proper infrastructure such as foot paths or seperate lane for mopeds and bicycles? It is also possible that the mopeds that are being issued in Balmer Island are not in proper condition such as having loose breaks, damaged handles or frame. In order to extrapolate the results from Seaville, the argument should provide details that can compare the quality of mopeds issued along with the infrastructure that is present in both places.
Assuming that both the places have adequate infrastructure and governance, the argument does not mention clearly that both these towns experience a similar population in summer meaning that the number of people in Seaville could be much lesser than Balmer Island. Next when comparing both the places, the argument should mention the ratio of private vehicles to that of mopeds used during summer to comapre the traffic scenario in both places. It is possible that the reduction of mopeds issued can motivate people to bring in the private transport which may further increase the number of accidents insread of redcuing them.
The suggestion made in the argument is not backed properly by the evidence provided and the basis on which the extrapolation is being done is dubious. Hence the recommendation provided may not provide the predicted result.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The question arises, can the moped drivers be completely attributed to these accidents or is it due to lack of proper infrastructure such as foot paths or seperate lane for mopeds and bicycles?
Error: seperate Suggestion: separate
Sentence: Next when comparing both the places, the argument should mention the ratio of private vehicles to that of mopeds used during summer to comapre the traffic scenario in both places.
Error: comapre Suggestion: compare
Sentence: It is possible that the reduction of mopeds issued can motivate people to bring in the private transport which may further increase the number of accidents insread of redcuing them.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: insread Suggestion: instead
Error: redcuing Suggestion: reducing
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2151 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.9 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.24 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...nd using its streets and there could be a large number of them using private vehicles. Meaning, o...
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Line 9, column 152, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...extrapolation is being done is dubious. Hence the recommendation provided may not pro...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98861047836 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67017418327 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48291571754 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3723064582 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2666666667 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53333333333 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24854083495 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813127469809 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709268363841 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130704183073 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913650865863 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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