“Bayside citizens need to consider raising local taxes if they want to see improvements in the bay side school district. Test scores, graduation and college admission rates and a number of other indicators have long made it clear that bayside school district is doing a poor job educating the youth. Our school looks rundown. Windows are broken, bathrooms unusable, classroom equipment hopelessly out of date. Yet just across the bay, in New Harbor, school facilities are up-to-date and in good condition. The difference is money; new harbor spends twenty seven percent more per student than Bayside does, and test scores and other indicators of student performance are stronger in New Harbor as well.”
Bayside area is definitely lacking in the education sector, but this conclusion stems from comparison with the New Harbour school. We know the facilities and the furniture is run-down and pretty awful, but we don’t know how this happened. It could be that the school management is misusing the funds given to them for this purpose, or it could also be due to the students’ rowdiness. For the former case, an inspector should be sent to evaluate the workings of school, and for the latter, students must be disciplined accordingly.
Test marks may not have a lot to do with the facilities of a school- often times a teacher can work magic with students and inspire them to greater heights. Bayside school must evaluate the quality of their teachers, and understand what is lacking in their way of teaching, and hire new teachers if need be. It is also to be seen whether students in either school can afford the school fees, and what is their economic state. It may be that students’ fee and the school fee structure have a lot of disparity, and this is creating the situation of lack of funds.
Increasing taxes may not be the immediate, viable solution- the school must first look at the quality of teaching it imparts and the kind of students that throng its halls. Then, the finances of the school must be evaluated in an impartial manner to determine how the money is being put to use.
- “Bayside citizens need to consider raising local taxes if they want to see improvements in the bay side school district. Test scores, graduation and college admission rates and a number of other indicators have long made it clear that bayside school dis 33
- We venerate loyalty- to our schools, employees, institutions, friends as a virtue. Loyalty, however can be as least as detrimental as influence as it can be a beneficial one. 100
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an impartial manner" with adverb for "impartial"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...inances of the school must be evaluated in an impartial manner to determine how the money is being put...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 2260.96107784 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 247.0 441.139720559 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71255060729 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64784137391 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53036437247 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 705.55239521 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 18.0723545782 57.8364921388 31% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 116.4 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144693050028 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669718729727 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265569170742 0.0701772020484 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102462634028 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348396170232 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.