We venerate loyalty- to our schools, employees, institutions, friends as a virtue. Loyalty, however can be as least as detrimental as influence as it can be a beneficial one.
Loyalty may sound simple in principle- you are pledging yourself to a person, or perhaps any ideals, or to an institution. Your actions and behavior henceforth have to match with your promises: you have to practice what you’ve solemnly sworn upon. There is no going back on your word, not without having to deal with others’ broken hearts and disappointment about your failure. Breaking your word is tantamount to breaking trust. An unsaid declaration to stick with the ship even while it’s sinking is as important as loyalty pledged with an “I do.”
An employee pledging himself to his superior and the company has his loyalty tested when he has to make a choice between a tempting offer from a competitor or sticking to his guns in his current workplace. A husband may find himself wondering about his wife’s loyalty when she comes home from a dinner with work friends- but has to trust in his wife instead of casting undue suspicion her way. Loyalty forms a big part of our daily happenings- functioning in everyday human social circles would be hard if we didn’t trust each other or doubted the other’s loyalty. Even in the biggest democracy of the world, the Prime Minister has to trust his cabinet of ministers to carry out any collective decisions they may take- their loyalty could stem from avarice or power-hunger: nevertheless, their loyalty should be to their party and their elected head alone. A school alumni looks back with fondness at his alma-mater, because he had pledged loyalty to the place that taught him. A friend tells the other secrets in the hope that they won’t be on the grapevine tomorrow- all because of underlying loyalty. Trust and loyalty runs the world as we know it.
But often times, loyalty can be a mistake- to a wrong belief, a falsified ideal, or blindly following a head. In cases like these, loyalty is detrimental. One cannot keep faith with something that is leading to ruin, and loyalty is almost always the reason why. Who can question the head of a company that his decisions may not be the best course of action for his employees, when all of his board members worship the very air he breathes? Who can question the principal of a school when all his teachers are puppets who agree to his wave of reforms without knowing what the students actually want? Such loyalty does more harm than good, and no one benefits from misplaced trust.
The point being, loyalty has to be questioned at times, for a healthy relationship. People must not be blind in their dealings with the world at large- they must always know when to push the brakes on something detrimental. Blind loyalty is a recipe for disaster. Instead of putting loyalty up on a pedestal and preaching it all the time, a healthier attitude would be to look twice before crossing the road.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpany has his loyalty tested when he has to make a choice between a tempting offe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2362.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 488.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84016393443 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62657280661 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2158401536 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.476190476 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2380952381 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.19047619048 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181545366094 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614835934286 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444874035417 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112398084874 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583694496361 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.