The argument mentions that local people in Benton City have changed their lifestyles into a better diet since their diets are closer to the government recommendations than before. Additionally, there are more food products contained kiran while a steep decrease sale of sulia. The author concludes that the obesity rate in Benton City would be lower than the national average. However, there are some questions rendering the argument a little unconvincing.
First of all, the argument cites that the current diet habits are more similar to the government advices than ten years ago. Nevertheless, they are compared to different standards, the government advices of now and ten years ago. The ten years ago suggestion might be not as accurate as now. Therefore, close to ten years ago suggestion or not is not comparable to nowadays condition since they are compared to distinct standards. In other words, this assumption might not be valid. The author should compare them to the same recommendation.
Moreover, the writer contends that there are more kiran-contained productions and lesser sales in sulia which is not the favorite food of the healthiest residents. Nonetheless, the argument brings the production and sales information, but not absorption of the residents. There is no obvious causation between sales and absorption. Probably, both kiran food and sulia are sold to other cities. Then, no matter their production and sales are large or small, it would not affect the citizens’ absorption as well as their bodies. In this way, the citizens might still digest the regular food as before and their obesity rate would also stay the same as before.
Finally, the argument points out that the Benton City inhabitants have applied a diet which is healthier than before, so they will have lower th obesity rate. Notwithstanding, there are many ways could affect human beings’ health, such as exercise, living environment, and medical knowledge. Even if they really adopt a healthier diet, they might still suffer from obesity for low exercise rate, food pollution, and wrong obesity knowledge. The altogether lifestyle includes many factors, and diet is one of them. Hence, only one factor cannot predict their future health condition so well.
To sum up, an issue about the connection between recommendation of ten years ago and now is vexing. Furthermore, the relation between sales and real absorption amount is also ambiguous. Thirdly, all other factors which would influence lifestyles are not provided. To bolster the argument, the writer might need to offer more information to answer the above questions.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, while, such as, as well as, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29116945107 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80860583854 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520286396181 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9354977703 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.68 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221250568837 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578181427629 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717458340373 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121264452857 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731610865627 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, while, such as, as well as, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29116945107 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80860583854 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520286396181 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9354977703 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.68 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221250568837 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578181427629 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717458340373 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121264452857 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731610865627 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.