Based on a recent survey of Benton City residents, the author comes to a conclusion that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average. Although inference seems logical, the argument is rife with holes and assumptions, not strong enough to lead to the conclusion the author wants. Following problems serve to undermine the argument.
First and foremost, the author presents the evidence that, based on the survey, the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. The argument suggests that these government nutritional recommendations is good to healthy conditions of residents, and in consequence lead to a lower the obesity rate in the future. However, the author is falling to take into consideration that the opposite is plausible as well. Ten years is not a long period that could reveal whether these recommendations are efficacious or not. Even though these recommendations could be effective in the other cities, they probably do not suit Benton City residents. To strengthen the argument, the author would benefit from implementing an elaborate survey about the effectivity of government nutritional recommendations in the other cities for decades.
The author also presents that, based on the survey, sales of sulia have declined dramatically. Since sulia is a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, the author deduce that residents would benefit from the declination of sales of sulia, and have a lower the obesity rate. But a fallacious causal relationship is built. The author falls to consider other possible alternatives. It is possible that the healthiest residents hardly eat sulia because the healthiest residents are usually wealthy while sulia is a kind of conventional food for the poor. Maybe sulia is not produced in the area where these healthiest residents live. Anyway, the declination of sales of sulia could not be inevitably connected to the healthy lifestyle. Unless the causal relationship between these two things is valid and reliable, it could not be used to effectively back the argument.
In a nut shell, although at first the argument proposed by the author seems cogent and convincing, there are several gaps in the reasoning. In the consideration of the fact given, some other alternative possibilities are plausible as well. The author falls to adequately support the inference presented in the argument. To validate the argument, the author would need to more information about the effectivity of government nutritional recommendations and sales of the declination of sales of sulia.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this government' or 'these governments'?
Suggestion: this government; these governments
...n years ago. The argument suggests that these government nutritional recommendations is good to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35731414868 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09067405282 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455635491607 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1619998681 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.380952381 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255233230974 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072465002809 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116211878265 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151455417584 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124189110174 0.0628817314937 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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