"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument proposes that a bicycle lane be added to the Blue Highway to reduce rush-hour traffic because commuters complain of increased traffic at peak hours on the Highway.
In order to strengthen this argument, one will want to ascertain how statistics of commuters' complain. Was the survey carried out with questionnaires randomly given to commuters? This information is needed to add evidence to the claim.
Widening the highway, by adding an additional lane may alleviate motorists stress. But the claim that addition of a lane on Green Highway was followed by worsening traffic jam debunked this idea.Whether Green Highway is also between the suburb and city center was not stated. Perhaps Green Highway may have been an alternative route to Blue Highway and traffic worsened because every commuter preferred passing the Green Highway since it had an additional lane and thus volume of commuters increased. The fact that Green Highway experienced worsened traffic jam after the additional lane does not necessarily imply that Blue Highway will experience Jam.
The idea of creating additional bicycle lane is probably not a good one. Travelling from suburbs to city center on bicycle is a longer journey for commuters and pose an increased risk of accidents during the rush hour. More evidence needs to be provided on the assurance of cyclists safety on the highway.
To strengthen the argument that additional bicycle lane be added to the blue highway rather than a motorist lane in order to reduce rush hour traffic, substantial evidences on the statistical data of commuters complain, comparison of volume of traffic between the blue and Green Highway and the assurance of cyclist safety.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 275 350
No. of Characters: 1406 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.072 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.113 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.223 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.25 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is needed to add evidence to the claim. Widening the highway, by adding an addit...
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Line 9, column 26, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
... claim. Widening the highway, by adding an additional lane may alleviate motorists stress. But the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whether
...orsening traffic jam debunked this idea.Whether Green Highway is also between the subur...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 655, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that Blue Highway will experience Jam. The idea of creating additional bicycle ...
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Line 17, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...affic between the blue and Green Highway and the assurance of cyclist safety. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 274.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30291970803 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73977739997 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507299270073 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.6675844291 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.083333333 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.49654357658 0.218282227539 227% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188383459976 0.0743258471296 253% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128733902192 0.0701772020484 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293919554934 0.128457276422 229% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120312109946 0.0628817314937 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.