Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
In the given argument, author claims that the students of Omega university have not been successful at getting jobs as if we compare to Alpha university. For convincing this statement author has stated different example that in Omega university professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent so through this author gives different examples but these all the examples have many flaws and loopholes.
Firstly, to encourage the students Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes and author claims due to this only grade of Omega has risen by 30 percent. Author claims through this drastic change in grades of overall class but there might be possible that some of the student had worked hard and through that also the grades of Omega students has been increased by 30 percent. We cannot judge the grades of particular student when we talk about the overall grade.
Secondly, in the second line author claims that potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and not accurately reflect student achievement as a result. In this argument author just guesses that just because of dramatic rise in grades particular student can achieve this score so that only particular student cannot achieve jobs but there might be possible that the capability of getting jobs are not there in particular student and it might be possible that student might be not eligible or not fulfill the criteria that whatever company want from the student.
Thirdly, to prove the statement author has compared Omega with Alpha and also claims that Alpha students could be successful like that if Omega want to be successful, Omega should terminate student evaluation of professors. In this statement author has compared Omega with Alpha. First, we can never ever compare students with others because all the students have different capability to do anything so this is just an irrelevant argument done by the author.
Lastly in the conclusion, for convincing Omega students could not be successful just because of dramatic rise in grades author gives many examples and also claims the different possibilities but as we have seen above that the given examples could not be satisfied the conclusion that given in the argument. To prove this statement, author has used very vague and irrelevant examples and also compared with the success of Alpha students without any relevant proof.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2081 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.418 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.591 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.46 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.703 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.263 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... class but there might be possible that some of the student had worked hard and through tha...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in particular, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1598062954 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48351328475 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387409200969 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.9558275111 57.8364921388 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.583333333 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4166666667 23.324526521 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25793634029 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128160551505 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956102322866 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175719797265 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951920695459 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 14.3799401198 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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