The author claims that Sartorian company should produce the alpa coats as they expect more demand and profit as fabric supply is available again after five years. Further, the author provides few pieces of evidence which might look convincing at a first glance. However, a crucial analysis is required to affirm the argument as true.
First of all, the author claims that new fabric supplier are available and that they can resume production. The auhtor fails to mention whether the new fabric supplier is providing the same quality wool as the company were using five years ago. There might be chances that wool could have been developed by usage of some chemical methods. The author must provide evidence about the quality of wool that are available at present so that alpa coat that were released five years back will be same if produced now in order for higer profit and demand.
Secondly, the author purports that huge amount of customer outcried when the company stopped the produciton of the alpa coat five years back. What if the customers have moved to new place?, or whether the same amount of customers who stated their discontent still present in the same area after five years. The author must provide statistical data figures for the demand of customers for alpa coat after they have got the fabric supplier.
Thirdly, the author claims that no other company could offer a comparable product when they discontinued five years ago. There might be a possibility that new company could have worked and have come up with alpa coat during the time period of over five years. The author must provide evidence whether there are any other companies that are producing alpa coat after they have got raw material again.
In summary, the author must provide above stated evidences in order to aver the given argument as credible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the customers have moved to new place?, or whether the same amount of customers ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93247588424 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19514084156 2.78398813304 79% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479099678457 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4523724792 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.571428571 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162827017269 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672726232732 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478726045265 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914247105162 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594209818818 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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