The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
According to Dr. Karp, the conclusion which Dr. Field had made about the children of Tertia island twenty years ago is incorrect. To prove this, he had recently conducted a similar study on the children of Tertia which Dr. Field had done. The argument of Dr. Karp rest on series of assumptions that are illogical and unpersuasive. This would be proved in the following essay:
Firstly, the study done by Dr. Field was two decades ago, which is a huge time ago. Many things have change in the last twenty years. There is no mention that Dr. Karp had studied the same set of children which Dr. Field had done. The children which Dr. Field had studied have now become adults. The thought process about things could change from one generation to another. Unless, there is mention that the same set of children were studied both the times, it would be wrong to suggest that Dr. Field conclusion about the children is invalid.
Secondly, Dr. Karp states that observation-centred approach is incorrect. He states that interview-centred method should be followed as it gives more accurate understanding of the subjects. There is so much assumptions in this statement. Like, it might happen that the children which were studied got nervous during the interview so the answers were different, also there is no mention about number of questions which were asked during the interview or what were the number of participants in the study. Unless, we know about all these parameters it would not be right to conclude that interview-based approach is better than observation.
Thirdly, the team of Dr. Karp consist of graduate students. It might happen that as they were fresher, they interpreted the answers of the children in a different manner. Also, this could be a case that as there was no experience person in the team of Dr. Karp the results which they found differ from the one which Dr. Field had found twenty years ago.
In conclusion, Dr. Karp should consider all these factors before coming to any kind of judgement. Unless, same factors are available and compared it is very difficult to conclude that any study is wrong or the method which one has followed is incorrect. To strengthen the claim Dr. Karp should send more experience people to interview the children and increase the number of children for the interview.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1885 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.593 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.81 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.404 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...erstanding of the subjects. There is so much assumptions in this statement. Like, it...
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Line 3, column 505, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he number of participants in the study. Unless, we know about all these parameters it ...
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Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...interpreted the answers of the children in a different manner. Also, this could be a case that as the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88860759494 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6722283507 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430379746835 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.2867185536 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.55 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244524834751 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886449690046 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660023254414 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156993935174 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568253493849 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.3550499002 143% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.197005988 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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