following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people ten to twenty-five years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that an introduction of life like videos games by whirlwind will increase sales of whirlwind video games in the nearest future. it comes to this conclusion based on several assumptions which present a distorted view of the situation. evidence used to come this this conclusion is based a survey of players. However, the assumptions made from the evidence need to be identified before whirlwind can move on with the recommendation.
Firstly, there is an assumption that the number of people surveyed is representative of the whole gaming population. questions like.- how many people where surveyed? what was the method used in the survey? what was the mode through which the survey was carried out?- arise. For instance, the survey could have been done with a sample size of just 100 people. In a case where the gaming population is about 1 million people, the view of these 100 people cannot be representative of the total population. also, the sampling might be biased and only responses from a particular region or a particular sect might have been used. there are usually different communities in gaming and the views of one community cannot be used to assess the views of the other communities. Understanding if the sample of the study is good enough to come to the conclusion that the author did is important, seeing that if the group of people surveyed do not mirror the views of other people in the gaming community can lead to whirlwind making a very big mistake.
Futhermore, the author make an assumption that there are no other lifelike graphic video game vendors that can carter to the needs of the gaming community. was there a study to evaluate; level of competition in the market, level of loyalty of gamers to these vendors. In a case where there is fierce competition in the lifelike graphic scene, whirlwind afre at a disadvantage seeing that that they are new to the market. also, how good is the quality of product offered by the competition? if the completion have great user experience, it would be difficult for a new company like whirlwind to take customers from them. it important to identify this assumption as it play a major role in a case where whirlwind are about to make implementations based off the argument of the author.
In conclusion, it is a great thing that whirlwind are looking for an opportunity to improve sales, but the assumptions that have been identified questions if the proposed route is viable and wouldn’t result in even more loss for the company. Hence, a more comprehensive survey should be carried out not just among the gaming community but also to identify competition and other vendor already in the scene. With results from this, whirlwind can make a more informed decision by considering all factors in play.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2267 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.763 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.726 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.368 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...wind video games in the nearest future. it comes to this conclusion based on sever...
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Suggestion: Evidence
...sent a distorted view of the situation. evidence used to come this this conclusion is ba...
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Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: this
...of the situation. evidence used to come this this conclusion is based a survey of players...
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Suggestion: Questions
...ntative of the whole gaming population. questions like.- how many people where surveyed? ...
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Suggestion: What
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...representative of the total population. also, the sampling might be biased and only ...
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Suggestion: Was
...r to the needs of the gaming community. was there a study to evaluate; level of com...
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...whirlwind afre at a disadvantage seeing that that they are new to the market. also, how g...
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Suggestion: If
... of product offered by the competition? if the completion have great user experien...
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Suggestion: It
... whirlwind to take customers from them. it important to identify this assumption a...
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Suggestion:
... off the argument of the author. In conclusion, it is a great thing that whi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2334.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 475.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91368421053 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81224548248 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458947368421 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1717828227 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.090909091 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5909090909 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13636363636 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249752462137 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737703614299 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667273802462 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158867814564 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571986337983 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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