In this report, the author tells us that compared with twenty years ago, there are only on-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate phisical finess. And the experts attributed this decling to the using computers in an extraordinary time. While the most healthy people live in the place where the computers ownership are also hightest, hence the author attributed the decline in the economy is most likely the cause of low finess of the people in Corpora. There are some loopholes in this report , the conclusion is not well supported by the facts. We shoule evaluate the carefully.
Firstly, the time and standards are the main two significant variance in this report. Unfortunately, the author negelects both of them. There may be lots of changs and shifts during the twenty years,which is long enough to a rise of one gerneration. Thus these significant changes will influence the populations and standars of finess with a high possibility. For example, maybe the poplulation of this place increased significantly , the composition of population is more complicated than twenty years ago.Thus the topic of people's finess is a tricky one. On the other hand, due to the development of the society, the standard will also change possibly. Thus the comparison by the epxerts are not compelling. I suggest them to focus on a certain group of people, hence the report will be more convincing.
Secondly, we can not determine the using of computer in an extraordinary time will be harmful to the people who lives in the place where the computers ownership also highest. Because there is no obvious relationship between the two issue. One can use computer both in a healty way or unhealthy way which we can not figure out. For example that maybe the highest computer ownership means high income, there is a high possibility that these citizens are rich, they can live in the way whatever they want, thus they can surf the Internet all the day, which will do harm to their eyes and bones also metabolisms.
Finally, there is no obvious relationship between the decrease of economy and the finess levels of the people. The author tells us that due to the doldrums of economy in this place, there are low expenditure on finess related products and service, while we can not assert directly that the people will be unhealthy due to the doldrums. Of course people with less consuming ablity would not purchase more unecessary products in the life, thus the lower comsuption of finessrelated products is predictable.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this report, the author tells us that compared with twenty years ago, there are only on-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate phisical finess.
Error: on-quarter Suggestion: quarter
Error: finess Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: phisical Suggestion: physical
Sentence: And the experts attributed this decling to the using computers in an extraordinary time.
Error: decling Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While the most healthy people live in the place where the computers ownership are also hightest, hence the author attributed the decline in the economy is most likely the cause of low finess of the people in Corpora.
Error: hightest Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: finess Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: We shoule evaluate the carefully.
Error: shoule Suggestion: should
Sentence: Unfortunately, the author negelects both of them.
Error: negelects Suggestion: neglects
Sentence: There may be lots of changs and shifts during the twenty years,which is long enough to a rise of one gerneration.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: gerneration Suggestion: generation
Sentence: Thus these significant changes will influence the populations and standars of finess with a high possibility.
Error: standars Suggestion: standard
Error: finess Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, maybe the poplulation of this place increased significantly , the composition of population is more complicated than twenty years ago.Thus the topic of people's finess is a tricky one.
Error: finess Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: poplulation Suggestion: population
Sentence: Thus the comparison by the epxerts are not compelling.
Error: epxerts Suggestion: experts
Sentence: One can use computer both in a healty way or unhealthy way which we can not figure out.
Error: healty Suggestion: health
Sentence: Finally, there is no obvious relationship between the decrease of economy and the finess levels of the people.
Error: finess Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The author tells us that due to the doldrums of economy in this place, there are low expenditure on finess related products and service, while we can not assert directly that the people will be unhealthy due to the doldrums.
Error: doldrums Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: finess Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Of course people with less consuming ablity would not purchase more unecessary products in the life, thus the lower comsuption of finessrelated products is predictable.
Error: ablity Suggestion: ability
Error: unecessary Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: comsuption Suggestion: consumption
Error: finessrelated Suggestion: fines related
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 426 350
No. of Characters: 2064 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.543 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.845 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.656 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.498 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
...lthy people live in the place where the computers ownership are also hightest, hence the ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 523, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... There are some loopholes in this report , the conclusion is not well supported by...
^^
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...hangs and shifts during the twenty years,which is long enough to a rise of one gernera...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ng enough to a rise of one gerneration. Thus these significant changes will influenc...
^^^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...on of this place increased significantly , the composition of population is more c...
^^
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
... more complicated than twenty years ago.Thus the topic of peoples finess is a tricky...
^^^^
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... more complicated than twenty years ago.Thus the topic of peoples finess is a tricky...
^^^^
Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...the standard will also change possibly. Thus the comparison by the epxerts are not c...
^^^^
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
...people who lives in the place where the computers ownership also highest. Because there i...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e the computers ownership also highest. Because there is no obvious relationship betwee...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99528301887 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75800718419 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481132075472 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2843779169 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115493258104 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336015007998 0.0743258471296 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697127755841 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717786350637 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651258710178 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.