The author here argues that the citizen in forsythe have adopted healthful lifestyles, since, in their eating habit they conformed more closely to the government nutritional recommendation. Stated in this way, the author fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. On a support of this argument, the author notes that, the people in forsythe are using more food products containing a substance called kiran, which is known to reduce cholesterol and also are avoiding the use of food products containing sulia-a food that few of the most healthy citizen regularly eat. However, a careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides only a little credible support to the author's recommendation. Hence, the argument is incomplete.
First a fall, the author readily assumes that the people are adopting a healthy life on the basis of report of survey. To evaluate this claim, we need a evidence about if the survey is representative. If the sampling population is not large enough and the people in a survey are biased, then, the result of survey does not reflect the eating habits of the majority of the citizen and the result would not be conclusive. For this reason, the author's argument is weakened because the given supporting evidence is problematic.
Moreover, the author also implied a link between the selling of the food products containing a substance called kiran, and the citizen adopting a healthful lifestyle. In order to prove the veracity of the link, the author should clarify whether the use of a food products containing kiran is due to people concerning about their health or due to other reason. May be now a days the food manufacturer add a substance containing kiran in almost all the foods and so people are using them without knowing that it help to reduce the cholesterol. If this is true, then, it will weaken the argument.
Furthermore, the author also connect the selling of the food product containing sulia and the people adopting healthy life style. In order to support this statement, the author should mention the nutritional content of sulia. If it is found that, it is a healthy substance then the argument would be weakened . Also, it may have happen that the taste of the food products containing sulia is not good and the people don't like to eat that, so, the selling may have decreased. If this is true, then, it will undermine the argument.
To sum up, in order to evaluate the argument, we should ensure several assumptions; whether the survey is representative, is the people buying more food containing kiran due to becoming health conscious. Therefore, in its present form, the argument is flawed and unconvincing due to the lack of adequate evidence in a support of this claim.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK, but not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 468 350
No. of Characters: 2243 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.651 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.793 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.652 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.056 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 714, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...s only a little credible support to the authors recommendation. Hence, the argument is ...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...survey. To evaluate this claim, we need a evidence about if the survey is represe...
^
Line 2, column 442, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...not be conclusive. For this reason, the authors argument is weakened because the given ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...r health or due to other reason. May be now a days the food manufacturer add a substance c...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...alth or due to other reason. May be now a days the food manufacturer add a substance c...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 309, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ance then the argument would be weakened . Also, it may have happen that the taste...
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Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...t would be weakened . Also, it may have happen that the taste of the food products con...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 417, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...aining sulia is not good and the people dont like to eat that, so, the selling may h...
^^^^
Line 4, column 498, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y have decreased. If this is true, then, it will undermine the argument. To sum ...
^^
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s; whether the survey is representative, is the people buying more food containin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92719486081 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75040009309 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415417558887 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0899953191 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.05 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.35 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173923368343 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599094333942 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120186554729 0.0701772020484 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105925019 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682775954872 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.