In given article, the author proposes that the government progress actions focusing more on educating people about bicycle safety and less on encouraging or requiring bicyclists to wear helmets. However, despite the presented arguments, several questions need to be answered for each of the argument to be assessed adequately.
First of all, the author assumes that helmet wearing rate has gradually increased from 35 percent for ten years ago to nearly 80 percent for today; however, this might be not persuasive without any certainty. Even it is true that the first research was a nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling, the result is flexible in order to deduce the accurate research. For instance, the sample size of bicyclists might be contingent on affordability. If, ten years ago, bicycle was not affordable for people who live with average salary, the sample size might have not been sufficient enough. However, if today’s bicycle is accessible for people to purchase it for themselves, the sample size might be enough to plausible research. Affordable bicycle between two periods might have been created quite such a large difference of the rate. Thus, in order to support percent difference between two periods, additional evidence is proposed.
Moreover, the author asserts that during ten-year period, the number of bicycle-related accidents has drastically increased 200 percent than the past due to wearing a helmet which result in making bicyclists feel safer and being risky ,which might lead the conclusion to be unwarranted. However, according to the assumption in the statement, drastic increased percent of the number of bicycle-related accidents might guide readers to questions. For example, survey respondents might be biased in young bicyclists. While old bicyclists are more likely to ride their bicycle safely, young people tend to enjoy themselves faster when bicycling which lead them to accident. Unless the sample is collected from all age groups, the result is heavily skewed toward high accident rate. Therefore, further proof such as collected sample from all age groups is necessitated to build strong connection with high accident rate between two periods for producing successful conclusion.
Last but not least, in the reading passage, the assumption that the cause of higher bicycle related accident rate might be based on whether wearing helmet which is the sole determinant determining the higher accident rate. The argument could be explained with clearly with an example. Other possible reasons might substantiate this argument such as the spot where the research took place. Even bicyclists wearing helmets are protecting themselves from accident, in dangerous places such as near roads, regardless of whether wearing helmet, the possibility of accidents is high enough to accumulate into records of accidents. Hence, other plausible determinants are required to bolster up the assumption.
To sum up, further evident pertaining above assumptions is required to be corroborated for an adequate evaluation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ng bicyclists feel safer and being risky ,which might lead the conclusion to be un...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46346555324 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80551618507 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521920668058 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4310133808 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.619047619 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218599387484 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619135360575 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672541242557 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106385803551 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755019529643 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 98.500998004 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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