The following appeared in a letter to the city council of Canbury from the president of Plexma Motors.
"I am pleased that the council is considering Plexma's plans to open a new manufacturing site in Canbury next year. In addition to our regular line of cars, Plexma has also begun designing and testing a line of automated self-driving vehicles. In a recent survey conducted by local media, 60 percent of Canbury's residents reported that they would purchase a Plexma self-driving vehicle in the future if they were confident in the vehicles' safety. We are happy to report that last summer, we tested our new line of self-driving vehicles in downtown Canbury with great success. Not only did our five tested vehicles remain accident-free for two months during testing, but in a survey conducted after testing, 90 percent of Canbury's residents reported that when they were downtown and our vehicles were in operation they felt very safe. Because steady demand for our self-driving vehicles will create new jobs and thereby greatly benefit Canbury's economy as a whole, I recommend that you vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing and selling these vehicles in Canbury."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the above letter, the author argues that people should vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing their self-driving vehicles in Canbury since using a self-driving car not only provide safety but also offer more new jobs thus significant economic growth. The author supports his claim based on the survey report of Canbury residents that they will purchase self-driving cars if they are safe enough to drive. Furthermore, the author fortifies his claim about the safety of self-driving cars by stating that during their two months trial their 5 cars never met an accident. However, before evaluating the author’s argument three questions need to be answered.
Firstly, the author argues that the new self-driving cars will be safe for the Canbury people since during their test in downtown Canbury their 5 vehicles were accident-free without any justifiable evidence regarding the two regions. One may raise questions about the authenticity of the comparison between downtown Canbury and Canbury. Are those two regions similar? In other words, is it possible to use a circumstance from one thing to predict and generalise another? Maybe these two regions are not similar at all. Maybe Canbury is situated in the city where roads are more crowded whereas downtown is a more rural area where traffic is not very dense. There is a possibility that downtown roads are more developed than in Canbury. If any one of the above situations is true then the author’s argument holds no water. The author does not provide any information regarding these two areas. If the author can provide more admissible evidence perhaps in a form of a systematic research study about both of these regions then it will be possible to evaluate the author’s argument to a certain extent.
Secondly, the author props his claim that self-driving vehicles are pretty safe since during the 2 months trial 5 tested vehicles never met an accident without providing any evidence. One may raise questions about the authenticity of the testing. Is the sample size sufficient? Maybe only testing 5 vehicles is not sufficient to conclude the safety of a vehicle. Furthermore, is only testing 2 months enough? Maybe only 2 months of testing is not enough to conclude everything about safety. Furthermore, maybe most of the people in the survey do not have sufficient knowledge about a car’s safety standards. Then using their opinions to determine the car’s safety is seriously unwarranted. The author does not provide adequate data to support his claim about the safety of a self-driving car. The author has to provide more evidence perhaps in the form of a survey of safety experts and include more vehicles for testing then it will strengthen his argument, otherwise, the author's argument is built unreliably.
Thirdly, the author states that steady demand for self-driving cars will create new jobs thus, Canbury’s economy will boost after manufacturing self-driving cars without any evidence. Is manufacturing self-driving cars needed by people? Maybe those cars need machines which are operated by computer simulations to meet their sophisticated phenomena. Even if this is not the case, Plexma may want to hire experienced people from their other cities instead of the people from Canbury in their factories. In that case, the author’s argument about creating a new job is seriously unwarranted. The author does not provide any legitimate evidence regarding the hiring of people from Canbury. The author has to provide more evidence perhaps in a form of a research study about Plexma’s hiring policies to rectify his claim.
In conclusion, the author’s statement is flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author answers the three questions above and offers more evidence perhaps in the form of a systematic research study then it will be possible to evaluate the author’s recommendation that beginning manufacturing self-driving cars will be lucrative for Canbury in the long run.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 33 15
No. of Words: 643 350
No. of Characters: 3290 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.036 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.117 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.753 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 250 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 186 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 130 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.485 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.43 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.402 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w self-driving cars will be safe for the Canbury people since during their test i...
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Line 2, column 738, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ads are more developed than in Canbury. If any one of the above situations is true...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... information regarding these two areas. If the author can provide more admissible ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... author’s argument to a certain extent. Secondly, the author props his claim tha...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... authors argument is built unreliably. Thirdly, the author states that steady d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, whereas, as to, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3371.0 2260.96107784 149% => OK
No of words: 643.0 441.139720559 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24261275272 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03561760524 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85541714479 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.387247278383 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1065.6 705.55239521 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.5778976651 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.151515152 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4848484848 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9696969697 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107594081496 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318592724638 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394281945677 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778105267236 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448591140859 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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