In the argument, the author concludes that recent article on corporate downsizing is false. He comes to this conclusion based on recent report, unemployment rate, and number of created jobs. While the author’s assertion could prove true, he should provide three pieces of evidence in order to bolster its credibility.
First of all, the author needs provide evidence regarding the types of ex-employee’s occupations. It is possible that most people were working in office, or non-industrial jobs which do not require hard-work or skillful people. In this case, even by providing abundant job in industry, they remain without job as they it is incompatible with their skills. Moreover, perhaps most of people who has forced to leave their jobs were students. In this case, many students are not able to work in industries which require years of experiences and knowledge. They were working in bar or restaurant as it does not require most of the above criteria. Therefore, if above examples are true, the author’s conclusion would considerably hamper.
Secondly, the author should provide more data about the way which recent survey was conducted. It could be possible that the conductors were negligent, and did not take into account many people who were suffering from lack of jobs. Furthermore, maybe many employees who have lost their jobs, forced to leave the city in the hope of finding a suitable job. In this case, the unemployment rate did not include them, which leads to unreliability of this survey. In addition, it could be possible that most worker who lost their jobs were coming from adjacent cities, subsequently, the conductors did not consider them as part of their statistic. If either scenario has merit, the author’s assertion does not hold water.
Finally, the author should provide evidence regarding the ex-employee’s job conditions. It might be possible that most of them had part-time job, as they are students or disabled persons, and now they are undeployed as the market is full with full-time job. In addition, perhaps most of the workers who lost their jobs, were heads of their department or were holding high position in their previous careers. However, now most jobs pay above-average which is not proper for them due to their lifestyle. In this case, they are not able to pay their expenses if they choose these kinds of available jobs. Even maybe they feel sense of shame to do interview for these jobs as they were prominent people such as CEO. Assuming either case is valid, the auth’s conclusion would fall apart.
In conclusion, the author’s claim, as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumption. Hence, if the author would like to make the prompt more persuasive, he should provide three pieces of evidence regarding above possibilities.
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- The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper Your recent article on corporate downsizing in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship o 16
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government industry or other fields must be highly competitive Other people claim that in order to be successful a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others 79
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government industry or other fields must be highly competitive Other people claim that in order to be successful a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others 83
- The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of Bargain Brand Cereals One year ago we introduced our first product Bargain Brand breakfast cereal Our very low prices quickly drew many customers away from the top selling cereal companies A 83
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2293 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.931 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.603 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.299 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.303 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...ry, they remain without job as they it is incompatible with their skills. Moreove...
^^
Line 2, column 378, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...le with their skills. Moreover, perhaps most of people who has forced to leave their jobs wer...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'worker' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worker
...In addition, it could be possible that most worker who lost their jobs were coming from ad...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 143, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...ossible that most of them had part-time job, as they are students or disabled perso...
^^^
Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...evidence regarding above possibilities.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30835117773 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98803836635 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496788008565 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5994625802 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.681818182 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2272727273 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.094641199003 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346637255052 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474118747618 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0570249799392 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352647657536 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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