In the memo, the author concludes that Bargian Brand should work on new low-priced food products. This conclusion relies on several premises such as succeeding their cereal over a year, and being a profitable product. Although the author’s assertion could prove true, he should answer three questions in order to bolster his persuasiveness.
First of all, is cost of producing of new products the same as breakfast cereal? It is possible that the technology and equipment for cereal are less expensive than other products. In this case, the profit of cereal is coming from these cheaper machines, but for initiating new line of products, the owner has to invest more money, which subsequently could reduce the profit. Moreover, maybe cereal production does not need skillful and experienced staff, by contrast, most of other products require professional workers who need higher salary. Likewise, the profit could be lower compared to the cereal process as they have to dedicate more money for employment section. If either case hold water, the author’s suggestion would considerably hamper.
Secondly, is author sure that BB breakfast cereal will sustain its sell? It might be possible that, due to its newness, people were keen to buy and taste them. After a year, it could become like other product and people will looking for new brands in order to escape their routine and find new experiences. Furthermore, maybe with the emergence of new lower-priced cereal, people would abandon BB cereal as the price is high priority for them. In addition, even if there would be no new lower price cereal and people are loyal to the product, an unpredicted side-effect will show up. In this situation, not only they could lose all customers, but also it put huge burden on the owner’s shoulder if he has to pay the medical expenses and it leads to bankruptcy and closure of the company. If above examples have merits, the author’s conclusion would fall apart.
Finally, are other factors lead to lower price which is exclusively for this product? It could be possible that the owner of company has many hectors of maize nearby. This might get them an advantage as they do not need mediators who cost them. In addition, maybe the lands are near factory; therefore, the transportation cost would be reduced. On the other hand, the new products require barn, for example for diary, which the owner does not in possess. They should contact many farmers to reach an agreement for supplying their demands, which is competitive with other companies and may not lead to higher profit as they have to compromise. In either scenario, the author’s suggestion is not overly compelling.
In conclusion, although the author’s suggestion for expanding low-priced products could be sound, he should consider answering above three questions if he wants to make his argument credible.
- The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of Bargain Brand Cereals One year ago we introduced our first product Bargain Brand breakfast cereal Our very low prices quickly drew many customers away from the top selling cereal companies A 83
- The following appeared in an article written by Dr Karp an anthropologist Twenty years ago Dr Field a noted anthropologist visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rat 62
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government industry or other fields must be highly competitive Other people claim that in order to be successful a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others 79
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government industry or other fields must be highly competitive Other people claim that in order to be successful a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others 83
- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper quot The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago During this same time 79
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'look'
Suggestion: look
...ome like other product and people will looking for new brands in order to escape their...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 564, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[14]
Message: Did you mean 'side effect' (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)? Open compounds are not hyphenated.
Suggestion: side effect
...re loyal to the product, an unpredicted side-effect will show up. In this situation, not o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 475.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28210526316 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90287926605 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538947368421 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3388523535 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.045454545 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5909090909 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171135120753 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569639552733 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472896775435 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10293450315 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472393480802 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'look'
Suggestion: look
...ome like other product and people will looking for new brands in order to escape their...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 564, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[14]
Message: Did you mean 'side effect' (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)? Open compounds are not hyphenated.
Suggestion: side effect
...re loyal to the product, an unpredicted side-effect will show up. In this situation, not o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2509.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 475.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28210526316 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90287926605 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538947368421 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3388523535 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.045454545 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5909090909 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171135120753 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569639552733 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472896775435 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10293450315 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472393480802 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.