In the memo, the author concludes that they should adopt interview-centered approach to studying culture. This conclusion relies on several premises such as twenty years ago research by Dr.Field, and recent interview by author. While this assertion could prove true, he should provide three more evidence in order to bolster his argument credibility.
First of all, the author needs to provide evidence regarding observation-based approach. It is possible that twenty years ago, Dr.field had not made mistake, on the other hand, the situation has changed. In this case, parents tend to leave their children as they engage with everyday task, and limited time for taking care of them. This could not be arisen because of observation method solely. Even if, he did make mistake, it could be due to negligent or other minor factors, and it is not rational to question this method because of one researcher’s fault. Therefore, the author should consider other results of the same approach in studying of cultures.
Secondly, the author should provide more information regards subjects of children’s talks. It might be possible that children were complaining about their parents who left them with the strangers. They were furious as their parents leave nothing for them, and they were suffering from miserable life with even worst childhood memories. In addition, they could talk about their wishes to see their biological parents, or even the desire characteristics of their parents. In this situation, they wanted to attract sympathy from others in the hope of helping them to find their real parents. In both cases, while they were talking about their parents, not other adults, this could not mean that they had lived with them.
Finally, the author should provide evidence regarding the interview-centered method. It might be possible that children do not understand the question, as they are not mature yet, and tend to answer because of getting reward, like a candy. Moreover, it is possible that the island’s authorities’ persuasive children to lie in order not to reveal some unethical actions behind the scene. They could do it to continue abusing children, and forcing them to work hard without considering their ages. Therefore, it is more plausible to announce that they have parents to take care of them, and provide what they needed, like food and shelter. If either case has merit, the author’s conclusion would fall apart.
In conclusion, while the author’s assertion could hold water, he should provide three more evidence regarding other observation-mased approach results, subjects of children talks, and way in which interview-based approach would be conducted, if he wishes to increase his argument’s credibility.
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government industry or other fields must be highly competitive Other people claim that in order to be successful a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others 79
- The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper Your recent article on corporate downsizing in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship o 16
- The following appeared in an article written by Dr Karp an anthropologist Twenty years ago Dr Field a noted anthropologist visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rat 62
- The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of Bargain Brand Cereals One year ago we introduced our first product Bargain Brand breakfast cereal Our very low prices quickly drew many customers away from the top selling cereal companies A 79
- The best way to solve environmental problems caused by consumer generated waste is for towns and cities to impose strict limits on the amount of trash they will accept from each household Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree 50
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2233 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.122 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.722 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.184 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.314 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Field
...uch as twenty years ago research by Dr.Field, and recent interview by author. While ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'even the worst'.
Suggestion: even the worst
...ere suffering from miserable life with even worst childhood memories. In addition, they c...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...elping them to find their real parents. In both cases, while they were talking ab...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, talking about, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 28.8173652695 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48974943052 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00389688841 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53986332574 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1490131896 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.761904762 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.80952380952 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0825238737974 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321651476662 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389376976143 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557069286095 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244774870382 0.0628817314937 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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