In this letter, the author argued that he does not agree with the idea of the editor who wrote an aticle recently, showed that corporate downsizing in Elthyria could not handle with the problem that there are still a majority of competent workers who losted jobs as the result of downsizing had to face a sreious economic hardship before getting a new job, which took years. In order to undermine the idea of the editor, the author shows us another phenomenon. That is from the recent report on the Elthyrian economy, we can see that there are far more jobs created than have been eliminate since 1999.which brought the unemployment rate to its lowest level in decades. Also, two-thirds newly created jobs salaries tend be paid above average wages, mean while most of the people in Elthyria are full-time workers. It seems the atuhor's evidence are compelling while every of them should be reexamined carefully ,because there are some loopholes in the letter.
To begin with, the two authors' statements may discuss different group of people, that is the most unconvincing point of this letter to the editor.Firstly, from one hand, the editor told us there are still lost of people out of work and suffered from the tough life or had tough times before getting jobs, while the atuhor told us there are more workers employed than eliminated. In this conditon, maybe the editor from the newspaper was inciting the case of the old competent workers who had worked for decades, but the author of the letter is showing us the working condtions of newly employeed wokers who had just wokred for several years. In this way ,the two statements both make sense, moreover, as to the author of the editor of the national newspaper, I fully comprehend him because he is a kind-hearted man who take care of the people in needy situation.But the author of this letter should make clear whtether there are realy this group of people who had to face serious economic hardship before getting jobs again.
In addtion, there is another point that maybe misunderstood by the author. Given that a recent report shows that more workers are employed than eliminated, maybe the employed workers are all young people while the old competent workers have not work to do, even if they have skills, due to the development of technology, the factories do not need them with the skills anymore. Moreove, two-thrids of the workers' salarie are above the average wages. This is a vague data in that we do not know where does this average wages mean, or to be specific, if this is a national average wages, it is noe compelling to show us the real situations of the local wokers which may vary. Also, even if they are full time workers mostly, may be they are still young workers while not the editor of the newspaper mentioned, the old ones possibly.
To mitigate all the worries and concerns about the workes in Elthyria and also evaluate the reall effect of the corporate downsizing, the author should make a wide survey.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this letter, the author argued that he does not agree with the idea of the editor who wrote an aticle recently, showed that corporate downsizing in Elthyria could not handle with the problem that there are still a majority of competent workers who losted jobs as the result of downsizing had to face a sreious economic hardship before getting a new job, which took years.
Error: downsizing Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: aticle Suggestion: article
Error: sreious Suggestion: serious
Error: losted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To begin with, the two authors' statements may discuss different group of people, that is the most unconvincing point of this letter to the editor.Firstly, from one hand, the editor told us there are still lost of people out of work and suffered from the tough life or had tough times before getting jobs, while the atuhor told us there are more workers employed than eliminated.
Error: atuhor Suggestion: author
Sentence: In this conditon, maybe the editor from the newspaper was inciting the case of the old competent workers who had worked for decades, but the author of the letter is showing us the working condtions of newly employeed wokers who had just wokred for several years.
Error: employeed Suggestion: employed
Error: conditon Suggestion: condition
Error: wokred Suggestion: worked
Error: wokers Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: condtions Suggestion: conditions
Sentence: In this way ,the two statements both make sense, moreover, as to the author of the editor of the national newspaper, I fully comprehend him because he is a kind-hearted man who take care of the people in needy situation.But the author of this letter should make clear whtether there are realy this group of people who had to face serious economic hardship before getting jobs again.
Error: realy Suggestion: rely
Error: whtether Suggestion: whether
Error: kind-hearted Suggestion: kindhearted
Sentence: In addtion, there is another point that maybe misunderstood by the author.
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Sentence: Moreove, two-thrids of the workers' salarie are above the average wages.
Error: salarie Suggestion: salaries
Error: two-thrids Suggestion: two thirds
Sentence: This is a vague data in that we do not know where does this average wages mean, or to be specific, if this is a national average wages, it is noe compelling to show us the real situations of the local wokers which may vary.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: noe Suggestion: non
Error: wokers Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To mitigate all the worries and concerns about the workes in Elthyria and also evaluate the reall effect of the corporate downsizing, the author should make a wide survey.
Error: downsizing Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: reall Suggestion: real
Error: workes Suggestion: works
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 521 350
No. of Characters: 2420 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.778 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.645 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.325 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.629 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.224 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 518, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... recent report on the Elthyrian economy, we can see that there are far more jobs ...
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Line 1, column 583, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'eliminated'.
Suggestion: eliminated
...re far more jobs created than have been eliminate since 1999.which brought the unemployme...
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Line 1, column 751, Rule ID: MEAN_WHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'meanwhile'?
Suggestion: meanwhile
...aries tend be paid above average wages, mean while most of the people in Elthyria are full...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 911, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y of them should be reexamined carefully ,because there are some loopholes in the ...
^^
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...cing point of this letter to the editor.Firstly, from one hand, the editor told us ther...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...st wokred for several years. In this way ,the two statements both make sense, more...
^^
Line 3, column 863, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...e care of the people in needy situation.But the author of this letter should make c...
^^^
Line 3, column 941, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'groups'?
Suggestion: groups
...ake clear whtether there are realy this group of people who had to face serious econ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 960, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...there are realy this group of people who had to face serious economic hardship be...
^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d them with the skills anymore. Moreove, two-thrids of the workers salarie are ab...
^^
Line 5, column 580, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'wage'?
Suggestion: wage
...specific, if this is a national average wages, it is noe compelling to show us the re...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 698, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... which may vary. Also, even if they are full time workers mostly, may be they are still y...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 724, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...n if they are full time workers mostly, may be they are still young workers while not ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, still, third, while, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78420038536 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46221214165 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468208092486 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.75749891 57.8364921388 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.357142857 119.503703932 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.0714285714 23.324526521 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250705977946 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781993259621 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860724804833 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143695507762 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851479758486 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 12.197005988 135% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.