The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper.
"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this claim is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy, which found that since 1999 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated, bringing the unemployment rate in Elthyria to its lowest level in decades. Moreover, two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time."
*Downsizing is the process whereby corporations deliberately make themselves smaller, reducing the number of their employees.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument concludes that the majority of the competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing are facing several serious economic issues and are struggling to find new jobs and the argument doubts this conclusion based on several evidences of the increase of employment rate and new jobs being created. However, the evidences put forth for the claim are unwarranted and extra evidences would be needed to conclude the assumption.
The claim made by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy is that since 1999, many more jobs have been created in comparision to the jobs being eliminated. The report does not compare the increase or decrease in the employable population of the time period. It may be a possibility that the popoluation of Elthyrian economy would have increased much more compared to the increase in the number of jobs which would ultimately create the dearth of jobs overall. Also, it may be a possibility that these jobs would be taken by the people who have been from different from the native country and would have migrated from different countries. A proper survey would be needed for the kind of jobs that have been increased and if these vacancies were fulfilled only by the people who were removed as a result of downsizing to strengthen the argument.
Moreover, The evidence does not throw any light on the nature of the jobs that have increased. It may be a possibility that the new jobs that have been created would require different skills compared to the skills of the workes who have been removed as a result of downsizing process. Also, it is a possibility that the skills of the people who have been removed would no longer be required by the current market which would make the those skills obolete. Thus, it is unwarranted to claim based on the only assumption that the jobs have been increased not considering the nature of the jobs nor the kind of the skills the people who were downsized pocessed.
The argument asserts that 66% newly created jobs tend to pay high and are full-time. This has little to do with the fact that the people who have been removed would be skilled enough to get an employment from these jobs. Also, the data is insuffecient and doesn't provide for the information opf remaining 33%. If the remaining one third of jobs recieved lower wages then the financial problems of the Elthyrains would still persists. Also, there is no quantative comparision on how high or how low the wages were. In absebce of such evidences and knowing only limited facts, these evidence would do little to add any weight on the support of teh argument.
Thus, the evidences provided doesn't do enough to strengthen the argument and extra evidences mentioned above would be required to ensure that the claim is justifiable. In absence of such evidences the argument doesn't hold water. Thus, it is a possiibility if the above evidences are considered that the workers would have actually lost the jobs and it would be a difficult situation for them to find their employement back in the industries.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The claim made by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy is that since 1999, many more jobs have been created in comparision to the jobs being eliminated.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: It may be a possibility that the popoluation of Elthyrian economy would have increased much more compared to the increase in the number of jobs which would ultimately create the dearth of jobs overall.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: popoluation Suggestion: population
Sentence: It may be a possibility that the new jobs that have been created would require different skills compared to the skills of the workes who have been removed as a result of downsizing process.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: downsizing Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: workes Suggestion: works
Sentence: Also, it is a possibility that the skills of the people who have been removed would no longer be required by the current market which would make the those skills obolete.
Error: obolete Suggestion: obsolete
Sentence: Thus, it is unwarranted to claim based on the only assumption that the jobs have been increased not considering the nature of the jobs nor the kind of the skills the people who were downsized pocessed.
Error: pocessed Suggestion: processed
Sentence: Also, the data is insuffecient and doesn't provide for the information opf remaining 33.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Error: insuffecient Suggestion: insufficient
Error: opf Suggestion: off
Sentence: If the remaining one third of jobs recieved lower wages then the financial problems of the Elthyrains would still persists.
Error: recieved Suggestion: received
Sentence: Also, there is no quantative comparision on how high or how low the wages were.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Error: quantative Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In absebce of such evidences and knowing only limited facts, these evidence would do little to add any weight on the support of teh argument.
Error: absebce Suggestion: absence
Error: teh Suggestion: ten
Sentence: Thus, it is a possiibility if the above evidences are considered that the workers would have actually lost the jobs and it would be a difficult situation for them to find their employement back in the industries.
Error: employement Suggestion: employment
Error: possiibility Suggestion: possibility
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 529 350
No. of Characters: 2489 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.796 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.705 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.561 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.181 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 257, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...obs. Also, the data is insuffecient and doesnt provide for the information opf remaini...
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Line 13, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... for the information opf remaining 33%. If the remaining one third of jobs recieve...
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Line 13, column 426, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'persist'
Suggestion: persist
... problems of the Elthyrains would still persists. Also, there is no quantative comparisi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 30, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ment. Thus, the evidences provided doesnt do enough to strengthen the argument an...
^^^^^^
Line 17, column 211, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... absence of such evidences the argument doesnt hold water. Thus, it is a possiibility ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, third, thus, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2546.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 526.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84030418251 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60294696072 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.384030418251 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 797.4 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0236620009 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.3 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167790148555 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588762720426 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677180035517 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11244512469 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649388905003 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.