The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.
"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that the athletic competitions organized in the town of parkville to be stopped. Furthermore, these competitions are held responsible for the bad results in academics for the various students.The argument would have been much clearer if it would have included facts and details about the survey done on the students of parkville because it could have helped to test the situation more easily.
Firstly, the argument states that the children below age of nine participated in youth league sports and over 40,000 of them suffered injuries. By solely considering only this fact there cannot be any decision made by the people in parkville because based on this there can be no relation that can be established. There is no firm survey or any report that proves that out of 40,000 young students injured during the sports events how many were from parkville. Just by discontinuing the events, it is not healthy to take opportunity from the students. Sports is very much essential for teaching students discipline and teamwork. In addition to that, it also helps in the overall personality development and if students are performing outstandingly well they can represent the country at national and international levels and can win medals for the country.
Secondly, the argument mentions about the pressure handled by youth league soccer players exerted by the coaches and parents to win the game. This claim is also very weak as the author does not mention the details of the cities in which the students were interviewed. there is also possibility that not a single child from the city of parkville has been interviewed and just depending on the reasons stated in the argument students will be deprived from the great chances they can get to build their career in the field of sports.
Thirdly, the authors claim about the long practice sessions for sports taking time for academic activities also appears to be very weak. In addition to this claim if the author would have provided some survey report that mentions the degradation in the academic performances of the students who constantly take part in sports event would have been very helpful to evaluate the situation.
In the conclusion, I would just like to add the point that if the author would have included details about the students of city of parkville relating to the number of students participated in the sports events and how many got injured then this would have helped to evaluate the situation more easily. In addition to these details if author would have also included interview experience of students of city in various issues then there would have been no conflict in deciding the outcome. So, in my opinion in the absence of these details the argument remains weak and is open for debate.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 467 350
No. of Characters: 2287 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.649 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.897 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.561 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.895 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...degradation in the academic performances of the students who constantly take part...
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...ike to add the point that if the author would have included details about the students of city of p...
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... to evaluate the situation more easily. In addition to these details if author wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01287553648 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63327368548 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452789699571 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.2979525209 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.125 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116256286698 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457510737853 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739733128687 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0641796959733 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041727603132 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.