The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper."Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth- league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.
"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth- league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."

Author state that children below age of nine suffered injuries by the sport activity.Injuries was happen because of pressure extered by the coaches and parents to win games.This view is wrong describe by the author.Author is not mention which type of injuries happen and why.And,without statistics author should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine.

First,Author did not mention the clear reason behind the injuries.It may happen that greater than age of 9 also suffered from injuries.In every sports, safety equipment is necessary to carry or available on field.It was also possible that couch and sports committee did not follow the safety standards.if we talk about the cricket than safetypad for leg,armpad necessary to wear but many people ignore the safety and play the cricket without it.

Second,Author also exhibited that youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win game.It was a servey of several major cities that doesn't means that it is also applicable for parkville.And,This survey was about only for soccer not for other sports games.

Third,Education experts say that instead of sport training time that could be used for academic activities.Education is only develop mental health.sports is necessary to develop physical health along with education.so,It should not give a proper reason to discontinue athletic competition.
To sum up all,Author did not describe proper reason to discontinue to athletic competition in parkville. And,Many cities survey of soccer player is not valid conclusion on injuries happen because pressure exerted by couches and parents to win games.

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.282229965157 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.16724738676 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.114982578397 0.0836205057962 138% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0557491289199 0.0520304965353 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.01393728223 0.0272364105082 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142857142857 0.125424944231 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0174216027875 0.0416121511921 42% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.26421258945 2.79052419416 117% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0348432055749 0.026700313972 130% => OK
Particles: 0.00348432055749 0.001811407834 192% => OK
Determiners: 0.0487804878049 0.113004496875 43% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.01393728223 0.0255425247493 55% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.01393728223 0.0127820249294 109% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1723.0 2731.13054187 63% => OK
No of words: 258.0 446.07635468 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.67829457364 6.12365571057 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.57801047555 88% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.472868217054 0.378187486979 125% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.333333333333 0.287650121315 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.232558139535 0.208842608468 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147286821705 0.135150697306 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26421258945 2.79052419416 117% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 207.018472906 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550387596899 0.469332199767 117% => OK
Word variations: 54.3682811352 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.039408867 30% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 43.0 23.2022227129 185% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 121.980872818 57.7814097925 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 287.166666667 141.986410481 202% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.0 23.2022227129 185% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.5 0.724660767414 207% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 3.58251231527 586% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 76.3333333333 51.9672348444 147% => OK
Elegance: 1.86764705882 1.8405768891 101% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29297161347 0.441005458295 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.188613807253 0.135418324435 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0905325203323 0.0829849096947 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.888778176625 0.58762219726 151% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158853650656 0.147661913831 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151570725815 0.193483328276 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100491855703 0.0970749176394 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.214298355482 0.42659136922 50% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0507065947833 0.0774707102158 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170711078084 0.312017818177 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101752410869 0.0698173142475 146% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 5.36822660099 19% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 4.0 14.657635468 27% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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