In this letter, the owner of the Sunnyside Towers aparment suggests his manager that all the twenty floors of the buildings shoud restrict the water flow to increase the profits. Because the first five floors of the apartment building's watersheds were modified, with fewer complaints by the residents, the author considers this method chould save the cost of company hence the profit will increase. To me I do not think this promotion will success in that there are some loopholes in this letter, we should evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, the author negelets the cost of modifying waterflow. At first there were merely five floors modified, if this implements promoted to all the twenty floors ,the cost of modifying will at least reduce the profit of the company which the atuhor concerns. Besides this change was implemented less than a month, the outcome is still in question. Moreover, the author tells us no problems with showers , while it does not mean these modified showers would not have problems forever. Thus we can not conclude this change will result in a considerable savings for the company.
In additon, the complaints can not represent the whole resident's opinion in this change. Although the author says there are just a few complaints about the low water,it does not mean the residents do not know this change, let alone the complaints of the residents, there is a silent majority with high possibility. Maybe the residents will vote by feet, in anther word, they will leave to other apartment instead of tolerating this small water.Thus the profits will inevitably lost by the leaving of residents.
Finally, with these flaws we discuss above, I do not consider it will be a wise choice to replicate this change to all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers. FIrstly,with the lacking of time in practice, we could not conclude this method really work. Secondly, the condition will be more serious by this change in all the floors as there would be more residents who do not accept this modifying , let alone the possibly silent majority who vote by feet. Thirldy, there are lots of factors related to profits of ths company, due to the cost of modifying water sheds, we can hardly predict the inceasing of profits in this company.
In conslusion, the recommendation suggests by the author is not well suppoerted by the evidence. Due to the time of practicing new policy, the result now is not compelling to us. I belive the author should not take mearsues like this anymore which may bring about complaints no matter in inside the residents' mind or directly to the company. Thus the author should figure out other plans to make profits, wisely and frankly.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this letter, the owner of the Sunnyside Towers aparment suggests his manager that all the twenty floors of the buildings shoud restrict the water flow to increase the profits.
Error: aparment Suggestion: apartment
Error: shoud Suggestion: should
Sentence: Because the first five floors of the apartment building's watersheds were modified, with fewer complaints by the residents, the author considers this method chould save the cost of company hence the profit will increase.
Error: chould Suggestion: could
Sentence: To begin with, the author negelets the cost of modifying waterflow.
Error: negelets Suggestion: neglects
Error: waterflow Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: At first there were merely five floors modified, if this implements promoted to all the twenty floors ,the cost of modifying will at least reduce the profit of the company which the atuhor concerns.
Error: atuhor Suggestion: author
Sentence: In additon, the complaints can not represent the whole resident's opinion in this change.
Error: additon Suggestion: addition
Sentence: Thirldy, there are lots of factors related to profits of ths company, due to the cost of modifying water sheds, we can hardly predict the inceasing of profits in this company.
Error: inceasing Suggestion: increasing
Sentence: In conslusion, the recommendation suggests by the author is not well suppoerted by the evidence.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
Error: suppoerted Suggestion: supported
Sentence: I belive the author should not take mearsues like this anymore which may bring about complaints no matter in inside the residents' mind or directly to the company.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: belive Suggestion: believe
Error: mearsues Suggestion: measures
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2179 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.758 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.415 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.985 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with fewer complaints by the residents, the author considers this method chould ...
^^
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ements promoted to all the twenty floors ,the cost of modifying will at least redu...
^^
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...author tells us no problems with showers , while it does not mean these modified s...
^^
Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...howers would not have problems forever. Thus we can not conclude this change will re...
^^^^
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
... complaints can not represent the whole residents opinion in this change. Although the au...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...ust a few complaints about the low water,it does not mean the residents do not know...
^^^
Line 5, column 445, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
... instead of tolerating this small water.Thus the profits will inevitably lost by the...
^^^^
Line 5, column 445, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... instead of tolerating this small water.Thus the profits will inevitably lost by the...
^^^^
Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
... water.Thus the profits will inevitably lost by the leaving of residents. Finally...
^^^^
Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , with
...enty floors of Sunnyside Towers. FIrstly,with the lacking of time in practice, we cou...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 395, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sidents who do not accept this modifying , let alone the possibly silent majority ...
^^
Line 9, column 182, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...e result now is not compelling to us. I belive the author should not take mearsues like th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...idents mind or directly to the company. Thus the author should figure out other plan...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, frankly, hence, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, at least, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92967032967 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54848929305 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485714285714 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.118871163 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.052631579 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9473684211 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143890394904 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470097716362 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073844927627 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088274410178 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806276535873 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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