The following appeared in a memo from a budget planner for the city of Grandview.
"When the Grandview Symphony was established ten years ago, the city of Grandview agreed to provide the symphony with annual funding until the symphony became self-sustaining. Two years ago, the symphony hired an internationally known conductor, who has been able to attract high-profile guest musicians to perform with the symphony. Since then, private contributions to the symphony have tripled and attendance at the symphony's outdoor summer concert series has reached record highs. Now that the symphony has succeeded in finding an audience, the city can eliminate its funding of the symphony."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that as the symphony has succeded in finding an audience, the city should cease the funding provided to the Grandview Symphony.For this claim, it has given the reasons that the Symphony has hired a high-profile conductor and musicians to perform with it and the Symphony’s outdoor summer concert series has reached record highs. Stated in this way the argument reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. So, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.
First,the argument readily assumes that the costs associated with hiring international conductor and high-profile guest musicians are moderate. This is a stretch. It is a possibility that the costs have risen drastically due to these eminent artists’ salary and the situation is alarming as it is deleterious to the economic situation. May be the Symphony is still in the incubation phase and arranging for such high profile artists to publicize the Symphony. If this is the case, there are chances that they aren’t fully self-sustaining and their budget is incumbent upon the funding from city. If they cease the funding, may be they won’t be able to pay the costs and become insolent. Second, the paragraph assumes that climbing private contributions are enough to compensate the increasing costs and they would come incessantly . As the money inflow has increased,this contribution are ample enough to bear all the expenses of the Symphony including payment of the artists, building costs, marketing costs, event costs, equipment costs.So the Symphony does not need any fund from the city. But if this is not the case , the contributions are actually a pittance compared to the costs of the Symphony, then stopping the fund would be detrimental to the growth and sustainance of the Symphony.
Finally, the argument has assumed that as the audience has risen, it means that there is indeed a prodigious increase in revenues . As the revenues has increased, the increased revenues are sufficient enough to make the Symphony self- sufficient. Here the definition of self-sustaining itself is unclear.Does getting an ample audience is enough to be self – sufficient or are there other factors on which the self-sufficiency is dependent. Just because audience has risen, doesn’t mean that are earning enough from them. May be they are doing it for free just to disseminate information about the Symphony and aren’t actually earning from it. There are no clear evidences regarding the revenues. Without cogent evidences, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantiate evidence.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2410 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.063 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.876 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.558 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.465 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...f the argument relies on the assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. So...
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...eterious to the economic situation. May be the Symphony is still in the incubation...
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...mean that are earning enough from them. May be they are doing it for free just to diss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, still, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2513.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36965811966 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09068552819 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50641025641 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6876495694 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.227272727 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178929368692 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415463967348 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061111152801 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100350850998 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611451790459 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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