While it might sound logical, at first glance, to agree with the author's conclusion that supplying UltraClean at all the hand-washing stations in the hospital will preclude serious patient infections, the author's argument does not make a cogent case. His reasoning to arrive at the conclusion based on the premise that a solution of UltraClean is able to kill more bacteria than the currently used hand soaps and that a hospital reported fewer cases of fewer patient infections while testing with Ultra clean, may have sounded rational and probable, but there were latent factors that the author should have considered.
Firstly, the author cited a laboratory test where a concentrated solution of UltraClean was able to reduce 40% more bacteria than did the liquid hand soap currently being used in the hospital. The author assumed that the UltraClean is comparatively more effective as it killed more bacteria. But, it is possible that UltraClean is only more effective as a concentrated solution and it might not effectively kill bacteria when it is diluted to usable proportions. Also, the extra percent of bacteria reduction might have been due to killing of harmless bacteria and so, the UltraClean is of no extra benifit to prevent patient infections. If the above situations has merit, the author's argument is significantly weakned.
Furthermore, the author used an example of Workby, where they reported significantly fewer number of patient infections than other hospitals in the group. The author failed to address the extra factors that might have caused the decline in infections. Along test of UltraClean, the hospital might have tested with other approaches to prevent patient ilnesses, making it possible to account other factors that "actually" made a impact in decreasing the infections. Also, it is possible that, WorkBy might have seen less infections compared to other hospitals due to the location factor. That is, Workby might be located in a small villiage where the number of patients is lower than that of other hospitals and so the number of infections might have been proportional. If this case is true, the author failed to make a good use of the Workby's example to make his argument strong.
Fianally, the author concluded that supplying UltraClean at all hand wash stations will reduce the patient infections. In doing so, the author assumed that supplying the solution will make sure of its correct usage. It is possible that the patients might not use the liquid was preferring the solid soap. Also, it is possible that even if patients use the hand-wash to clean their hands, the infections that spread could be airborne and thus the solution cannot prevent the infections.
In conclusion, unless the author substantiates his argument covering evidence to above assumptions, his argument remains unconvincing.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2341 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.111 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.417 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...cal, at first glance, to agree with the authors conclusion that supplying UltraClean at...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t UltraClean is only more effective as a concentrated solution and it might not e...
^^
Line 3, column 679, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... If the above situations has merit, the authors argument is significantly weakned. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... factors that 'actually' made a impact in decreasing the infections. Al...
^
Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun infections is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s possible that, WorkBy might have seen less infections compared to other hospitals ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be located in a small villiage where the number of patients is lower than that of...
^^
Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t the patients might not use the liquid was preferring the solid soap. Also, it is possible th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 450.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87443907572 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428888888889 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2030374763 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170701329015 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624168511771 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649310238445 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0971536858267 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077178576677 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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