While it might seem logical, at first glance, to agree with the author's explanation that physical activity demanded of the residents of stairs-only apartments cause increased health and longevity, his argument does not make a cogent case. The author's reasoning to arrive at the conclusion from the results of few surveys stating the correlation between people living in stairs-only apartments and increased health benefits, may have sounded rational and probable but there are latent factors that the author should have considered before. Moreover, he need to address few questions posed by the below alternative explanations to make his argument convincing.
First of all, the author deduces his explanation partly from the recent studies that purportedly showed a link between health and stairs usage. One such study that author mentioned shows a 3-year longer average lifespan of residents who live in stairs-only apartments. In reality, the mere correlation between using stairs and having longer lifespan does not help in answering if one of it causes the other. It could be possible that, people who live in stair-only apartment, on an average, earn less money that the others, and thus not able to spend money on rich and unhealthy foods. Thus having better health than higher earning people who usually can also afford to live in rich apartments where they can avail elevator benefits.
Moreover, the author further cites a study which shows that elderly residents of buildings with elevator visits doctor, on average, twice as many times as the residents of stairs-only buildings do. The author needs to know that the financial difference between these two types of residents could be a reason causing the high salaried ones to afford visiting the doctors more times than the other. Also, there can be other factors like, the buildings with elevators are mostly in middle of city where there is more air and sound pollution necessitating their dwellers to visit the doctors more often. This possibility of having other factors that causes the difference in lifespan among the two types of residents seriously undermines the authors argument
Finally, the author also based his conclusion on the doctor's survey reports, where the residents of stairs-only apartment scored higher in health related questionnaire than the residents of buildings equipped with elevators. There was not much information provided about the reports, like how many residents of either types had been investigated or any other details of the purpose of the reports. It could be possible that the report covered only handful of residents whose rating does not really scale to all the residents. If above is the case, the reports were of doubtful value in understanding the relation between stairs usage and health benefits, and so the author's argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, there are many rivaling explanations that can answer the above correlation from the presented facts. Unless the author substantiates his reasoning ruling out the aforementioned alternatives, his argument remains unconvincing.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 489 350
No. of Characters: 2568 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.702 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.252 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.681 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.69 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...cal, at first glance, to agree with the authors explanation that physical activity dema...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to visit'.
Suggestion: to visit
...ausing the high salaried ones to afford visiting the doctors more times than the other. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e how many residents of either types had been investigated or any other details o...
^^
Line 7, column 668, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...s usage and health benefits, and so the authors argument does not hold water. In con...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, really, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2620.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35787321063 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73330612991 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503067484663 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 812.7 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.9067872471 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.117647059 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7647058824 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317290669551 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10617552919 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958513720964 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164767288803 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149495619068 0.0628817314937 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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