The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author's argument that the Buckingham's enrollment is growing and will double in next 5 decades, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham. This might appear logical and convincing at first glance. However, a more critical analysis of the justification provided by the author has highlighted many queries. Therefore, the premises in their current form are not cogent and are prevalent with unwarranted assumptions, that makes it more susceptible to attacks.
To begin with, the premise that Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Since, Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years prediction of Universities future trends based on current trends is seems logical. Since, it is always reasonable to be prepared for future needs. However, trends are not permanent and we cannot presage the future needs. The space utilized for hostels can be used for more significant requirements in the near future. Additionally, the author did not mention that the increase in admission is from local students or from the students who belong from places from which they cannot commute daily.
Secondly, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Nonetheless, the actual amount by which it has increased is not provided. For instance, the increment in rent is by 1$ per week and there is increment in rent by 20$ per week both are considered to increase in rent. Moreover, the increase in average rent represents all areas of the town or it happened only in vicinity of the university, depending on region students could rent in those areas where the increment is not significant.
Lastly, the point that new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll in Buckingham is not cogent. According to survey made in 2018 about the preferences of the students while taking admission in a university. They first look out for universities ranking in their opted field and how efficiently the Buckingham’s could give in making student self-sufficient to crack the placements.
To sum up, the author's argument is based on unsubstantiated presumptions. The author should have reinforced his argument with more evidence to make the case more convincing. However, the author failed to examine these issues that the trends consider will be same for next 50 years and the actual amount by which the average rent is increased, thereby rendering the argument indefensible.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2266 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.174 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.874 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.777 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.783 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument that the Buckinghams enrollmen...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$1'.
Suggestion: $1
...r instance, the increment in rent is by 1$ per week and there is increment in rent...
^^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$20'.
Suggestion: $20
... week and there is increment in rent by 20$ per week both are considered to increas...
^^^
Line 7, column 412, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elf-sufficient to crack the placements. To sum up, the authors argument is based...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ck the placements. To sum up, the authors argument is based on unsubstantiated pr...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, however, if, lastly, look, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32648401826 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99517362302 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497716894977 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2011742509 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.434782609 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0434782609 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13043478261 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194161531104 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058936980937 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799909925694 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107859608864 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764411159614 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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