There is some impediment to the argument presented in the paragraph. Some suggestions will be presented to strengthen the argument.
However, at first, it might seem plausible, after a few moments we realize that it suffers from serious logical fallacies. First, the paragraph claims that Route 101 made by Good Intention company 2 years ago is in bad condition and in contrast, Route 40 made by other company is still in good condition even though 4 years have passed since its construction. One can argue that conditions in two routes might be pretty different. As an example, routes in rainy environments, or in environments that experience highly different temperatures in a day- such as deserted areas that temperature is high at noon at very low around 2-3 AM- have more chance of being destructed after a short period of time. And routes in mild temperature environments are less vulnerable. For making this argument a strong one from this perspective we have to have exact data of environment and places these to Routes were built and compare them using those data.
The second matter is the fact that things change at a very fast rate in the modern world and economy or business state might not be as good when the route 101 was built. Material needed to construct a good quality road might not be available at that moment when the Route 101 was being built. And this is not a good reason for concluding the fact that Good Intention company builds low-quality roads. For concluding so, we need to compare roads these two companies built in the same period of time. And another thing that is not defined precisely and we need to have an exact definition of the name given to Route 40 condition.
Another thing is that the argument states that the Appian Roadways are using state of the art technology but it does not say anything about the technology Good Intention Company uses these days. for disapproving, or approving one company we need to have the same data from both companies. If we have data from one company's used technology, we have to compare it to the other company's data of the exact same type. Finally, the paragraph concludes that roads built by Appian Roadways will be in good condition 4 years after its construction. there is no evidence presented for this conclusion and the only reason might at first seem reasonable, is the fact that there is one road that remained needless of repair for four years but there is no reason that other roads built by this company are in good condition after four years.
In conclusion, there is some evidence that could be used for more investigation for choosing between two companies but none of them is plausible enough to use for decision making.
- The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country."The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked 62
- The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disag 58
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1. need to argue:
In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager.
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 471 350
No. of Characters: 2206 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.659 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.684 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.555 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.348 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.215 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 562, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...hance of being destructed after a short period of time. And routes in mild temperature environ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 483, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...s these two companies built in the same period of time. And another thing that is not defined ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...ates that the Appian Roadways are using state of the art technology but it does not say anything...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...Good Intention Company uses these days. for disapproving, or approving one company ...
^^^
Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ndition 4 years after its construction. there is no evidence presented for this concl...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, then, another thing, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7940552017 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62922344728 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43949044586 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7829891541 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.842105263 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7894736842 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158050498346 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561057261715 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476346926692 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692861370062 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527464065254 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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